Writing Feedback / Junk Food Is Harmful To Teenagers [4]

You need to explain why junk food has an important role. Example: Junk food help people to fulfill their meal quickly. they help busy people to get their food without waiting to long. You need to tell more the composition of junk food that made it harmful. Maybe you can say that junk food is unhealthy because they made from unknown ingredients and usually contents so much fat because it is fried.

The point is I think you need more scientific base for this essay. for the second paragraph I advise you to see it more from psychology view of point too.

I hope this help you.