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May 10, 2018
Writing Feedback / Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity/IETLS task one [2]
The graph compares the proportion of males and females in six distinct age groups who regularly involved in physical exercise in Australia in the year of 2010.
Overall, it is clear that women were more engaged in doing physical exercise in most of the age groups. Meanwhile, the participation rate was very close between males and females in the group of age 65 and over while there was a discrepancy in other age groups.
The highest proportion of men who did workout on a regular basis with 52.8% was in the age group of 15 to 24 while there was only 47.7% in women. By contrast, 53.3% females who were more interested in physical activities, with more than 10% increased than males in the age group of 45 to 54. However, in the age group of 65 and over saw a close rate in men and women who did physical exercise regularly, with 46.7% and 47.1% respectively.
As can be seen, men in the age group of 35 to 44 had the lowest involve rate in regular body building, with just under 40%, while there was over 52% in women counterpart, with a gap of nearly 13% difference. In the meantime, in the age group of 25 to 34 and 55 to 64, both had similar increase rate with just over 7% in females than males who did physical exercise on a regular basis.
the total word is 234. I know it's way too much but had struggle shorten the essay. Any comment and suggestion will be highly appreciated!
statistics of fitness activity in australia
The graph compares the proportion of males and females in six distinct age groups who regularly involved in physical exercise in Australia in the year of 2010.
Overall, it is clear that women were more engaged in doing physical exercise in most of the age groups. Meanwhile, the participation rate was very close between males and females in the group of age 65 and over while there was a discrepancy in other age groups.
The highest proportion of men who did workout on a regular basis with 52.8% was in the age group of 15 to 24 while there was only 47.7% in women. By contrast, 53.3% females who were more interested in physical activities, with more than 10% increased than males in the age group of 45 to 54. However, in the age group of 65 and over saw a close rate in men and women who did physical exercise regularly, with 46.7% and 47.1% respectively.
As can be seen, men in the age group of 35 to 44 had the lowest involve rate in regular body building, with just under 40%, while there was over 52% in women counterpart, with a gap of nearly 13% difference. In the meantime, in the age group of 25 to 34 and 55 to 64, both had similar increase rate with just over 7% in females than males who did physical exercise on a regular basis.
the total word is 234. I know it's way too much but had struggle shorten the essay. Any comment and suggestion will be highly appreciated!
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