Writing Feedback / The reasons why some persons don't feel safe either at home or outside. [4]

TOPIC: People today do not feel safe either at home or when they are out. What are the causes?

a fear among people nowadays

There are some reasons why people currently have to face seriously risks no matter where they are. Firstly, high essential demands for foods that is needing to produce in a mass way to respond timely, people might face the danger of poisoning even they are at home. For example, food poisoning by chemical stimulants for fast developing plants, many people have been admitted to hospital to treat. Secondly, when being out on the street, individual is difficult to avoid traffic accidents when vehicles are more and more increased and complex, such as striking car or motorbike, breaking down of aircraft engine system,.. This might negatively affect people's health and even life-threatening.

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