RoseGold
Jul 8, 2018
Undergraduate / Common App Essay - "Do Dead Men Really Tell No Tales?" [2]
Hi, this is my first post on here (yay), and I would really appreciate some feedback on my college essay. I'm a bit scared that the topic I chose to write about is a bit risky since it's such a non-conventional topic. Plus, depending on which admission officer reads it, it could potentially be interpreted wrongly.
It would also be nice to have some suggestions on a more fitting title. I used the first idea I had, but I'm sure there's better options to describe my essay more accurately. Please be honest, and constructive criticism is always welcome! Thank you in advance :)
Prompt: Discuss an accomplishment, event, or realization that sparked a period of personal growth and a new understanding of yourself or others.
The daunting task ahead of me consisted of several oddly shaped packages piled on top of a metal table.
They were only about two to three feet long with one end protruding out and were extremely heavy to lift. According to the instructions I was given earlier that day, I had to pick them up and wrap them inside a huge plastic trash bag. Standing to my right side, a cheerful woman wearing a white lab coat helped me hold the trash bag open.
After hefting two or three packages into the awaiting bag, a sense of curiosity began to nag at the back of my mind. The lab specialist holding the bag open for me saw me lifting a corner of the package and casually mentioned, "Oh, those are just cadaver legs that we used for the Orthopedic lab this morning. We're done with them now, so we're going to ship them off."
I was stunned and absolutely speechless. I couldn't believe that this was the same volunteer opportunity that I signed up for in the beginning of the summer...
***
The next morning, I remained lying in bed when the alarm blared me to consciousness at 7:45. It was difficult to get up and return to the research institute due to the shocking events of the first day, but it was even harder to give up my commitment after only one day.
When I arrived at the lab, there was a full cadaver lying on a draped bed. An instructor dressed in black scrubs explained to us the procedure of channeling catheters through the arm into the heart and encouraged us to step closer for a better view. However, after a few minutes, one of the other volunteers began to sway and stumble around. Before he was able to faint onto the cadaver, the instructor successfully grabbed his shoulders and pushed him against a wall.
When he regained his consciousness, he looked up at all our concerned faces and began to laugh. The whole situation was brushed off as if it was completely normal, and he resumed his place around the back table. Once again, I was stunned and absolutely speechless. Even though he fainted in front of a large group of people, I was able to see the amount of courage it took for him to return standing in front of the cadaver.
Through the events that happened during the first few days of the summer, I was able to learn several important lessons. First of all, there will always be surprises regardless of whether you least expect them. Second of all, there's no use in being ashamed of anything, because how you deal with it afterwards is more important. Lastly, and the most important of all, even though the surprises that happen in life won't always necessarily be good surprises, there will always be a way to switch them around.
Hi, this is my first post on here (yay), and I would really appreciate some feedback on my college essay. I'm a bit scared that the topic I chose to write about is a bit risky since it's such a non-conventional topic. Plus, depending on which admission officer reads it, it could potentially be interpreted wrongly.
It would also be nice to have some suggestions on a more fitting title. I used the first idea I had, but I'm sure there's better options to describe my essay more accurately. Please be honest, and constructive criticism is always welcome! Thank you in advance :)
Prompt: Discuss an accomplishment, event, or realization that sparked a period of personal growth and a new understanding of yourself or others.
The surprises are unavoidable and it's no use of being ashamed
The daunting task ahead of me consisted of several oddly shaped packages piled on top of a metal table.
They were only about two to three feet long with one end protruding out and were extremely heavy to lift. According to the instructions I was given earlier that day, I had to pick them up and wrap them inside a huge plastic trash bag. Standing to my right side, a cheerful woman wearing a white lab coat helped me hold the trash bag open.
After hefting two or three packages into the awaiting bag, a sense of curiosity began to nag at the back of my mind. The lab specialist holding the bag open for me saw me lifting a corner of the package and casually mentioned, "Oh, those are just cadaver legs that we used for the Orthopedic lab this morning. We're done with them now, so we're going to ship them off."
I was stunned and absolutely speechless. I couldn't believe that this was the same volunteer opportunity that I signed up for in the beginning of the summer...
***
The next morning, I remained lying in bed when the alarm blared me to consciousness at 7:45. It was difficult to get up and return to the research institute due to the shocking events of the first day, but it was even harder to give up my commitment after only one day.
When I arrived at the lab, there was a full cadaver lying on a draped bed. An instructor dressed in black scrubs explained to us the procedure of channeling catheters through the arm into the heart and encouraged us to step closer for a better view. However, after a few minutes, one of the other volunteers began to sway and stumble around. Before he was able to faint onto the cadaver, the instructor successfully grabbed his shoulders and pushed him against a wall.
When he regained his consciousness, he looked up at all our concerned faces and began to laugh. The whole situation was brushed off as if it was completely normal, and he resumed his place around the back table. Once again, I was stunned and absolutely speechless. Even though he fainted in front of a large group of people, I was able to see the amount of courage it took for him to return standing in front of the cadaver.
Through the events that happened during the first few days of the summer, I was able to learn several important lessons. First of all, there will always be surprises regardless of whether you least expect them. Second of all, there's no use in being ashamed of anything, because how you deal with it afterwards is more important. Lastly, and the most important of all, even though the surprises that happen in life won't always necessarily be good surprises, there will always be a way to switch them around.