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zhigoolet   
Sep 19, 2009
Writing Feedback / Toefl Topic -- "A person you know is coming to your town" [5]

I believe that there are things in my town that my friend would definitely love them. He may like the peace. The beauty of the city would catch his attention as well. On the other hand, as this friend of mine is coming from a big city, he would easily get bored when he wants to have a walk in the city.

Unfortunately, this town is a little boring. The area of my hometown is not so much. You can get around in the city easily with your bike, and it wouldn't take you so much time. More or less, everywhere is accessible in 30 minutes. My town is dead at nights as well. All shops close on 8pm. You can't see anybody walking in the streets after 10pm. This may cause boredom.

On the other hand, this town is a really convenient place to live. The traffic is less than big cities like one he is coming from. You don't have to waste your time being stuck in traffic jams for several hours. In other words, there is no traffic at all. Besides, there is nothing called noise pollution. In fact, this place is calm and peaceful indeed. This may be far from what he has seen in big cities where he has lived before.

The place I live is famous for its beauty. There are several breathtaking sceneries here, and is different from urban surroundings for sure. The weather is also pleasant. The climate is highly diverse and can be far from torrential rain in spring to heavy snow in winter. He may be shocked when he sees unbroken sunshine in summer next to light wind in autumn.

Of course, the city where he will come from is much more interesting than my hometown to some extents. He would always find new things in his city. However, the place where I live in would attract him. This town is really tranquil and peaceful. Besides, my hometown has several beautiful sceneries. In one word, I guess he is going to like his new place.
zhigoolet   
Sep 19, 2009
Writing Feedback / Toefl Topic -- "A person you know is coming to your town" [5]

Thanks for your suggestions.
I am sure that your sentences sound more native than mine, but look at the essay, you corrected almost every sentences.
I think it is more helping if you evaluate my essay in my own words.
Although I learned a lot from your review, but I lost my confidence totally.

your suggested essay implies that only 3 to 5 of my sentences sound good. But I am not sure this is true.

Again, Your correction is really appreciated, but you know, I didn't want to change my essay to a perfect one. I just wanted to know which of my sentences were wrong .
zhigoolet   
Oct 12, 2009
Writing Feedback / Eating at Home or at a Restaurant? I prefer HOME [8]

I believe that your introduction seems a cliche, and according to ETS site, you should avoid remembering sentences which are applicable to many essays
zhigoolet   
Oct 12, 2009
Writing Feedback / learning language in your own country or the country it is spoken. [2]

Although there are some advantages to learning a foreign language in its original country, I firmly believe that people who learn a foreign language in the country in which it is spoken have a deeper understanding of different language skills than those who learn the same languages in their own countries.

Person 'A' who learns a non-native language in his country may receive benefit from a step-by-step teaching method. In other words, He is not jumping into the foreign country. Therefore he can set aside enough time and energy dedicated to learning the language. Besides, all the learners are probably from the same country, so all these people most likely have learned the language, more or less, in the same way.

On the other hand, when a new learner wants to learn a new language in the country in which it is spoken, he has the opportunity to communicate with natives. He may find native friends and may participate in groups where members are people from the foreign country. No doubt, it leads to better understanding of language essential skills. He also has access to the most up-to-date language. Thus he can learn most useful idioms, proverbs and so many other things which the former person, person 'A', does not have access to.

On the whole, if I wanted to learn a new language and had enough money to afford the travel, I would definitely make the second choice. There are lots of evidences show that communication is the most important factor in learning a new language. When you are exposed to an environment where everybody talks to you in the new language you want to learn and expects you express words from the same language, you are forced to learn it as soon and good as possible.

In a word, although each if these methods have their pros and cons, I am pretty sure that advantages of learning language in the country in which is spoken outweigh the advantages of the other way of learning of a new language.
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