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Posts by Tracytrinh1998
Name: Chinh
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Tracytrinh1998   
Aug 21, 2018
Writing Feedback / Aging population is good or bad for society (Let task 2) [4]

less children than elderly people



PEOPLE HAVE FEWER CHILDREN, MANY SOCIETIES HAVE A POPULATION WITH MORE OLD THAN YOUNG.
DO YOU THINK IT IS GOOD OR BAD FOR SOCIETIES.

Nowadays, the more society develops, the busier people are. Therefore, people do not have much more time to take care of themselves and their families. As a result , they have fewer kids and many societies face a population with less young than old. From my perspective, the phenomenon is bad for societies because it make bad effects for labour markets and governments will spend much more money for welfare. Also, economy will develop more slowly.

First of all, having fewer children and aging population are bad for societies because they make negative effects for labour markets. That is, the number of workers will reduce in the future. For example, a country has much less junior workers to senior workers will face lack of employees when their senior workers retire. As people understand, younger people are active and have many new ideas, so if companies do not have enough younger employees, they will loss many active ideas. If the number of kids is equal to the number of seniors, countries will have enough workers and many innovative ideas. There in, the government should encourage people to have enough children.

Secondly, welfare for the elderly is a negative effect that many societies having a population with less young than old face. In other word, when a population has too much older people, the government have to pay much more money for welfare. Also, citizens have to pay more money for tax and health care of their older relatives. If it is a balance between the younger and the elderly, each person will spend less money on tax and health care for the elderly.

Last but not least, there are no doubt that aging population and having fewer children make economic development slow down.In fact, today, many countries need to hire international workers to ensure the number of workers. Consequently, the domestic income will reduce. If these countries do not have to employ international workers , the countries' income will not decrease. Therefore, their economy can develop faster.

To sum up, aging population and having fewer children make countries face the lack of workers and the increase of welfare. Also, economy will develop less. Therefore, the phenomenon brings some drawbacks for societies.
Tracytrinh1998   
Aug 22, 2018
Research Papers / Researching expanding of life expectancy - paper [3]

In general, your grammar is good, your supporting points is good too, But In my opinion, I think you should explain deeply for reader. I think they are all supporting points, you should be add more specific informations and examples. It will help your essay better.
Tracytrinh1998   
Aug 22, 2018
Research Papers / A university education makes people more moral, intellectual or rational. Agree or disagree. Reasons [5]

I'm preparing to take the LET Test that is a test focusing on grammar and idea. Please check my ideas and grammar. I'm so glad to your help. thanks everyone

higher education (LET TEST)



A university education makes people more moral, intellectual or rational. Agree or disagree. Explain reasons.

Today, studying university become more and more popular not only for young people but also for senior people. Some people think that people will be more moral and intellectual when they study in university. In my opinion, I strongly agree with the statement because university education provide many moral lessons and supply knowledge for students. Also, it helps student detect talents and nurture them to follow their interests.

First of all, thank to moral lectures in university, people become more moral. That is, these lessons supply for students about right things, so they will become more ethic. Especially, students can learn how to collaborate and socialize through class' activities. Therefore, they can develop their manners and become a good person for societies. If university don't provide moral lectures and significant activities, students can have worse manners and make negative effects for societies.

Secondly, a university education brings not only academic knowledge but also real experience that help students can be more intellectual. In fact, university supplies many sciences help students be smarter, improve and develop their skills such as math, physic and so on. Also, people can gain essential experience through real lessons. Thus, they have enough knowledge, experience and become smarter to willing face difficulties in their lives.

Last but not least, studying in university helps people be more rational because students can detect their talents and be nurtured to follow their interest. That means, students can realize their talents and interests through talented lessons. For example, a student having a dance talent will attend in dance class and improve their dance skill. Consequently, they will become more intellectual in their field. If they do not know their talents and follow their interests, they will loss chances to develop themselves.

To sum up, a higher education help people be more intellectual and moral because it supplies moral lectures and knowledge in many fields. It also help student relize their interests and talents to follow it.
Tracytrinh1998   
Aug 22, 2018
Writing Feedback / Aging population is good or bad for society (Let task 2) [4]

I'm glad to see your essential feedback. I will try to use words that have accurate meaning.
I'm confusing that LET test require 3 paragraph for essay's body. When I read the topic sentence, I cant think enough information to support my essay.
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