kloud
Sep 20, 2009
Undergraduate / World you came from, personality - UC Prompt #1 & #2 [7]
Rough Drafts for my UC Prompts. Please, be as brutal as you can be. I'm not exactly sure if I answered the first prompt correctly. Thank you!
Prompt #1 (freshman applicants)
Describe the world you come from - for example, your family, community or school - and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.
The world from which I come from revolves around the teaching of my parents. Like the typical household, my family consists of four members, myself, my sister, and my parents. Unlike most families, we do not eat together during the week due to our conflicting schedules. Weekends are the only time that we can truly eat and spend time together as a family. Both of my parents are firm believers in education and success. During the weekend, we often visit the bookstore or go to the library to study. Both of my parents have achieved great success through their schooling. My mother is involved with the travel industry being the head of her department in accounting and my father is involved with Major League Soccer being the Chief Executive Officer of the Chivas USA soccer team. In addition to being involved with the MLS, my father is also an entrepreneur who owns a Subway restaurant.
Education and grades are heavily stressed by my parents. School is placed first before extra curricular activities, friends, and leisure. I often find myself going to bed very late studying and doing school work. I know that the education I receive will help me in countless ways because it will always remain with me wherever I go. During the summers, my parents want me to spend my time productively. Last summer, I attended a leadership camp at Columbia University and during the summer of my incoming sophomore year, I attended an academic camp at Stanford University. These camps have taught me things that I would never learn in the classroom.
Seeing what my parents have accomplished with their education has inspired me to become a successful individual. Later on in life, I plan to enter the food industry as an entrepreneur and to eventually own a franchised restaurant. My parents have taught me that for someone to get something, one must work hard for it. My dream of eventually owning a franchised restaurant can not happen without first obtaining a proper education. Like my parents, I am success driven. I like the feeling of accomplishing a task myself because it gives me a rewarding feeling.
Prompt #2 (all applicants)
Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are?
Ever since I was a kid, I have always been fascinated with martial arts. Watching martial arts stars such as Jackie Chan, Bruce Lee, and Jet Li on the television screen always left me with the thought of how awesome it would be to obtain a black belt. My father came home from work one day and asked me if I wanted to enroll in martial arts. I said, "Yes, I would like to!" In the fall of 2002 I enrolled in my first Tae Kwon Do class. I remember the first time I walked onto the studio mat being timid and transfixed at the sight of several black belts. I wanted to be just like them, I wanted to be a black belt.
As I moved up through the ranks, my motions became more second nature, more fluid, less choppy, and more graceful. When I reached my second red belt, I broke my left clavicle learning how to flip other students. I was unable to train for several months and in addition to that, I missed an opportunity to test for my black belt. This was setback and true test of my spirit. During this time I had a chance to reflect on my journey. I realized how far I had come in three years and how much I had grown as a person in terms of confidence and discipline.
In August of 2006 I had the opportunity to test for my first Dan (black belt). That day in August represented everything I had been through, the blood, the sweat, the tears, and the countless hours of training I endured. At the end of the grueling four hour test, Grand Master Kim untied my red belt and presented me with my first Dan. It took me four years of dedication and perseverance to achieve my black belt and it was an amazing feeling staring into the mirror and seeing myself wearing a black belt. To me, being a black belt is more than just another rank in the martial arts, it's a milestone that every martial artist strives for but only a small percentage actually achieve. It represents proficiency of an art and a new beginning. I am proud to say that I currently hold a second Dan in Tae Kwon Do, but I am even prouder of the new person I have become. Being a black belt is a way of life, to uphold the standards of honesty, integrity, and loyalty; to act in all areas of life with the honor, courtesy, respect, humility, and dignity leading by example in everything that I do.
-Kloud
Rough Drafts for my UC Prompts. Please, be as brutal as you can be. I'm not exactly sure if I answered the first prompt correctly. Thank you!
Prompt #1 (freshman applicants)
Describe the world you come from - for example, your family, community or school - and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.
The world from which I come from revolves around the teaching of my parents. Like the typical household, my family consists of four members, myself, my sister, and my parents. Unlike most families, we do not eat together during the week due to our conflicting schedules. Weekends are the only time that we can truly eat and spend time together as a family. Both of my parents are firm believers in education and success. During the weekend, we often visit the bookstore or go to the library to study. Both of my parents have achieved great success through their schooling. My mother is involved with the travel industry being the head of her department in accounting and my father is involved with Major League Soccer being the Chief Executive Officer of the Chivas USA soccer team. In addition to being involved with the MLS, my father is also an entrepreneur who owns a Subway restaurant.
Education and grades are heavily stressed by my parents. School is placed first before extra curricular activities, friends, and leisure. I often find myself going to bed very late studying and doing school work. I know that the education I receive will help me in countless ways because it will always remain with me wherever I go. During the summers, my parents want me to spend my time productively. Last summer, I attended a leadership camp at Columbia University and during the summer of my incoming sophomore year, I attended an academic camp at Stanford University. These camps have taught me things that I would never learn in the classroom.
Seeing what my parents have accomplished with their education has inspired me to become a successful individual. Later on in life, I plan to enter the food industry as an entrepreneur and to eventually own a franchised restaurant. My parents have taught me that for someone to get something, one must work hard for it. My dream of eventually owning a franchised restaurant can not happen without first obtaining a proper education. Like my parents, I am success driven. I like the feeling of accomplishing a task myself because it gives me a rewarding feeling.
Prompt #2 (all applicants)
Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are?
Ever since I was a kid, I have always been fascinated with martial arts. Watching martial arts stars such as Jackie Chan, Bruce Lee, and Jet Li on the television screen always left me with the thought of how awesome it would be to obtain a black belt. My father came home from work one day and asked me if I wanted to enroll in martial arts. I said, "Yes, I would like to!" In the fall of 2002 I enrolled in my first Tae Kwon Do class. I remember the first time I walked onto the studio mat being timid and transfixed at the sight of several black belts. I wanted to be just like them, I wanted to be a black belt.
As I moved up through the ranks, my motions became more second nature, more fluid, less choppy, and more graceful. When I reached my second red belt, I broke my left clavicle learning how to flip other students. I was unable to train for several months and in addition to that, I missed an opportunity to test for my black belt. This was setback and true test of my spirit. During this time I had a chance to reflect on my journey. I realized how far I had come in three years and how much I had grown as a person in terms of confidence and discipline.
In August of 2006 I had the opportunity to test for my first Dan (black belt). That day in August represented everything I had been through, the blood, the sweat, the tears, and the countless hours of training I endured. At the end of the grueling four hour test, Grand Master Kim untied my red belt and presented me with my first Dan. It took me four years of dedication and perseverance to achieve my black belt and it was an amazing feeling staring into the mirror and seeing myself wearing a black belt. To me, being a black belt is more than just another rank in the martial arts, it's a milestone that every martial artist strives for but only a small percentage actually achieve. It represents proficiency of an art and a new beginning. I am proud to say that I currently hold a second Dan in Tae Kwon Do, but I am even prouder of the new person I have become. Being a black belt is a way of life, to uphold the standards of honesty, integrity, and loyalty; to act in all areas of life with the honor, courtesy, respect, humility, and dignity leading by example in everything that I do.
-Kloud
