Posts by sg2468

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Sep 19, 2018

Undergraduate / Love for cooking - something you do for the pleasure of it. MIT [2]

Hi everyone! This is my essay for this MIT prompt, not sure if it is interesting enough. Please be harsh and comment on grammar and content!

We know you lead a busy life, full of activities, many of which are required of you. Tell us about something you do for the pleasure of it. (*)(100 words or fewer)

creating food with my own hands

It often seems that 'cooking' is synonymous with 'one chef', but in Ukrainian culture, food is a communal experience. On snowy winter nights after skiing, my family and friends gather to shape Вареники dumplings while sharing stories, filling everyone with warm food and a feeling of accomplishment. These memories of community and happiness are what fill me with pride and joy when I cook. Being able to use my hands to learn, mix, knead, and bake, then watch others feel comforted by what I create, makes me love cooking: although food disappears in minutes, the memories last for a lifetime.

sg2468

Oct 21, 2018

Undergraduate / My interest in Mathematics & Computer Science- UIUC Undergraduate [5]

Since this is an essay for UIUC, I would suggest including some specific details about UIUC's program that makes you interested in them. Maybe mention a specific class or a professor who does research in Artificial intelligence so that they see you have a concrete interest in UIUC.

sg2468

Oct 21, 2018

Undergraduate / "What are you going to be?" My identity essay for college [3]

... to keeping up with the superfluous ... my true passion.

I don't think you meant it this way, but to me this paragraph sounds a little like you're bragging or arrogant. I wouldn't say that you had "made the mistake" of spending so much time on schoolwork--it makes it seem like you think that studying hard is a mistake. Also putting words like "race" in quotes typically implies that it has an ironic meaning, which you do not want for this essay. I think you would want to rephrase it maybe by not saying that you made a mistake by spending time on schoolwork, but rather you had not focused on finding your true passions.

sg2468

Oct 21, 2018

Undergraduate / My Passion for Art - Essay about hobby/experience and how it affected you Upitt [2]

art was a key step in discovering my passion for chemistry

Art is about making mistakes. From the moment the paintbrush hits the paper to the second the pen lifts up, there are an infinite number of miniscule differences from what the picture looked like in my head to what it looks like on canvas. But art is also about adapting, about accepting criticisms and persevering by turning imperfections into flowing singularity. Those skills are what drawing and painting have taught me: to keep persisting even when reality is different from my imagination, transforming stumbles into a graceful final work.

It is considered plain fact that art and science are distinct subjects, the idea of a 'left' and 'right' brain dominating education. But for me, finding my love for art was a key step in discovering my passion for chemistry. These lessons in perseverance I learned from drawing and painting are what motivate me to keep trying to solve a difficult calculus problem or repeating a chemistry lab instead of giving up. (the previous sentence sounds choppy :/ )Art is a lesson in tenacity, and an experience which has taught me skills that every scientist and engineer has used to endure failures and overcome disappointments in order to make discoveries, cure diseases, and change the world. (199 words/200)

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I will also be including a link to some pics of my art, you can look at it at this link!