Scholarship / ONE OF THE REASON TO STUDY IN UK IS BECAUSE OF HARRY POTTER - CHEVENING [9]

Hi Widya..

I would like to give you my opinion on your essay.
Your first paragraph is really eyecatching, but unfortunately do not answer the given question. The rest of the essay not deeply explain appropriate and specific reason to study in UK.

You need to explain more about tour reason why you willing to study in UK towards your previous education, your professional career and your future career. In addition, you also need to explain three uviversity you have chosen, why you chose them and what their impact for you.