Scholarship / Undegraduate/Scholarship/ - Difficulties I have overcome - the door to my inside world [2]

I won't give up my dreams, no matter what

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1.(Title of the essay) Please explain how you have overcome financial or social difficulties, physical or emotional adversities which might have hindered you from studying during middle and high school.

At school, I was very diligent and excelled before my father died and left me orphan in this big and hard world. After the death of my father, our life became worse and worse day by day. In order to feed us, my mother had to go to Moscow again. We were left alone with my older sister and younger brother. Those were the most difficult moments in my life. My interest in life stopped. As a result, I was unable to concentrate on my studies: I began to miss a lot of classes and fell behind on a number of subjects, and eventually, my grades began to suffer. Being in the middle of my teenage years only made it worse. Consequently, the school administration kicked me out of the school. As soon as I heard about their decision, it seemed that I had just woken up from a long sleep. I recognized that I had wanted to give up, instead of being strong and rising above the loss of my father and my mother's absence. I realized If my dad was alive, he would be disappointed to see my condition. In order to my dad could be proud of me, I wanted to become successful to be an educated person. This was the most important thing which is motivated me to reach my goals. It was then that I decided to start all over again. I moved back to my village, entered a new school and studied very hard day and night. During the first few weeks, I noticed myself drifting away during classes, which caused me to fall behind in my lessons. So, to fix this problem, I began to re-read the materials that I missed during classes. With a lot of independent work, I caught up with my missing lessons. Just as it was before this tragedy, I became one of the best students. When I got the highest point on Republic Test I was on the top students to whom universities offer their university to study for free. Also, I won a scholarship at the preparatory program, ( the name of program) for studying English and applying to universities to abroad. I preferred to study in the Preparatory program because It was the best way that would be for me as a bridge which could help and prepare me for applying to UNIST the next year. While I was studying at Prep program, I noticed that I was still not ready to apply to UNIST academically, because my English was not good enough and I did not have good writing skills. My brain understood that it would be really, really hard and almost impossible to be accepted, but knowing all these facts, still, my heart could not release this dream. My heart won my brain and I started to give myself all 100% for application to UNIST. For the sake of my dream I sacrificed with all of me: only God knows how much I prepared, ignoring everything except study, even last days I forgot that I was hungry. As a result, I could apply to UNIST. However, I was rejected. I cannot describe how much pain I experienced at that time. I was disappointed. All my hopes to see the world, my dreams completely collapsed. I became a gray part of the crowd.

The most important thing is that, after 4 months of rejection, maybe you can believe or not, but still I really could not give up my dream to study at UNIST. Even though I was accepted to other universities I refused them because inside my soul I heard a voice which said that UNIST is the exact place where I can find myself and my destination in this life. That is why this dream possessed my whole mind. For the last years, I have been walking to UNIST step by step. During this period, defeated different obstacles, gain a stronger character, and I learned from my hardships. I recognized that I am responsible for my actions, I cannot blame others when I fall or fail and I have to choose to rise up and start again. By risking many things, I learned to be patient and insistent. The main thing is that I am happy that I am following my dream.

In the end, I want to say through this application I have opened to you the door to my inside world. There you could see the castle which was built out of my miseries, pains, and difficulties. You could see beautiful flowers which I cherished with my love, hopes, and dreams. Also, there you could see the mirror wherein the reflection you saw yourself.

Scholarship / Escaping - how you have overcome financial or social difficulties, physical or emotional problem [4]

1.Please explain how you have overcome financial or social difficulties, physical or emotional adversities which might have hindered you from studying during middle and high school.

escaping is not solution

Applying to UNIST three times was the biggest emotional obstacle I have ever experienced. Below is a long story, one girl who is not different from 7milliard humans in this earth as you are is opening to you the door to her INSIDE WORLD. Please, read it all!

My desire to study in Korea appeared in high school when I started to learn Korean language. After graduating from school, I could not apply to Korea, because I was not ready academically and mentally. However, I found a one-year-preparatory program- New Generation Academy (NGA) where I could have an opportunity to learn English and Math after which I would be able to apply to universities abroad. While studying at NGA, I heard from students about UNIST. At that moment I have filled with desire to study at UNIST. Honestly, when I started application process, neither I nor anyone believed for my successful application because of my poor English and little academic achievements. Despite that I decided to apply with only little hope.

When I opened the application of UNIST, I found out that I have to take official TOEFL iBT which made me scared mostly. With my English skills taking TOEFL was like flying pig. However, I didn't want to give up. I decided to take trial TOEFL and my score was overall 25. Still, I couldn't stop hoping to apply to UNIST and after a long time of thinking I decided to apply anyway. This decision turned around my life and exactly here starts my story. At that time, I had three most important things which I had to combine: preparing and passing TOEFL, writing essays for application and doing my homework on time. I had one month to write six essays and to increase my score from 25, also, I had classes with 40 credits per semester.

While filling out my application, I was writing and rewriting my essays again and again to make it better than before. I add to my essays the part of my heart. Therefore, the one who reads my essay can feel my passion for studying at UNIST and how hard I tried despite its grammatical mistakes. I liked my essays. They seemed me perfect because I could not write better...

Taking TOEFL IBT was like a war not only with reading, listening, speaking and writing difficulties, but also with self-discipline, time managing, and sleeping. At the beginning, it was hard getting use to sleep 3-4 hours, but time by time I accustomed to it. Whenever I got correct answers, it seemed like probability of acceptance to UNIST raised. I prepared day and nights ignoring everything except study. In course of time, I started to believe that I could be accepted and started to give all myself for application, to UNIST. Day by day, I noticed how my English was improving and my confidence for accepting UNIST was increasing continuously. In my dreams, I saw that I was studying at UNIST and then started to feel it as a reality. Finally, I got 91 points from TOEFL which at first was almost impossible, but I could do it anyway. This experience gave me more confidence for my ability to be accept to your university.

At the end of my story, I was rejected from UNIST, at that time it seemed like my life stopped and I lost my feelings because of shock, I could not neither cry nor smile. I became a gray part of the crowd. I realized that I was not ready for rejection because I was flying so much on my dreams. As if my life lost its meaning, maybe you can believe or not but death seemed easier than feeling those feelings. I did not want to do anything. I just wanted to escape. As soon as I graduated from NGA, I bought ticket to Moscow and decided never come back to my own country.

However, my escaping did not ease my pain. I realized that I had to stay face to face to my pain instead of escaping like coward. It was extremely difficult to find a courage to apply second time, but with my all strength I applied again. However, the result was as previously. Through this essay I want to say that my application processes to UNIST was one of my big life lessons which taught me to fail and to raise, to be confident at the same time to doubt, it showed me that the coin can get to either side, heads and tails are not important the main thing is to be ready to accept result. I am applying three times. My achievements and I am as a whole might still not be ready to study at UNIST but I don't give a fuck to adversities in the face of my goal. We born in this life just once. For me the meaning of life is pursuing your goal, dream, and desire. I am more than sure that if one has a strong desire then she/he can reach the mountain. I might be accepted and rejected as well. It does not matter how the result will be, it matters that I will continue living and dreaming and applying again!