mbk7162
Dec 11, 2018
Undergraduate / I am answering the why NYU Abu Dhabi question. Will it catch the attention of the admissions officer [3]
Your essay is commendable. However, there are a few things that you can improve. Firstly, you have discussed more about NYU Abu Dhabi and have related a little with your past experiences. If you can mention some of your experiences in regards to biochemistry courses, biological systems, or resolving children issues, and then relate that inspiration to NYU AD offerings, it would make a good impact. And yes, the introduction is a bit dramatic and does not relate well to the overall theme of your essay.
Your essay is commendable. However, there are a few things that you can improve. Firstly, you have discussed more about NYU Abu Dhabi and have related a little with your past experiences. If you can mention some of your experiences in regards to biochemistry courses, biological systems, or resolving children issues, and then relate that inspiration to NYU AD offerings, it would make a good impact. And yes, the introduction is a bit dramatic and does not relate well to the overall theme of your essay.