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Posts by prismatiiic
Name: Rodney Okyere
Joined: Dec 27, 2018
Last Post: Dec 28, 2018
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School: Hylton High School

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prismatiiic   
Dec 27, 2018
Undergraduate / GEORGIA TECH World-Class resources, professors, and peers have attributed to my computing experience [3]

Topic:

Why do you want to study your chosen major at Georgia Tech

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and how do you think Georgia Tech will prepare you to pursue opportunities in that field after graduation? (max 250 words)


Hi, I'm applying to Georgia Tech and with the deadline fast approaching I'd like some insight on this essay. I'm very appreciative to all that help. Thank you!

"World-Class resources, professors, and peers have attributed to my remarkable computing experience at Tech"

Reading that text from Omega meant one of two possibilities, either he was stretching the truth to mess with me, or he was truly enjoying his time as a computer science major at Georgia Tech. No matter the answer, Omega had piqued my interest, and immediately I resolved to become a Yellow Jacket.

Studying computer science in the College of Computing not only allows me to study data security, mobile computing, and become familiar with programming languages through the "Information Internetworks" thread, but also gain the abilities to write simple tools based on lexer/parser technology, gain knowledge in programming Abstractions/Paradigms and take the elective course "CS Special Topics Design of Gaming Consoles" - what can I say, I'm a gamer - through the Systems and Architecture thread. Through this weaving of threads, I can broaden my system knowledge of web technologies.

Through study abroad programs such as Japan's Tokyo Tech Exchange Program and South Korea's KAIST Daejeon Exchange program, Georgia Tech grants me the ability to pursue opportunities not only in America, but internationally as well. With Atlanta becoming a hotspot for startups, groups such as Create-X exposes me to the world of entrepreneurship, and gears me towards creating products using the knowledge I've acquired as a Comp. Sci. major at Georgia Tech. I plan to utilize every opportunity given to me and represent Georgia Tech as a proud Yellow Jacket.
prismatiiic   
Dec 27, 2018
Undergraduate / I see myself at Dartmouth -Dartmouth supplement (100) [6]

I think that you answer the prompt just fine, and the tone is fine as well. The first sentence in the second paragraph, however, can be revised. There's no need for the parentheses here - , (and inhaling ...-magazine)
prismatiiic   
Dec 27, 2018
Undergraduate / What is your role in your immediate family - GT Supplemental Essay [5]

Hi, I'm applying to Georgia Tech and with the deadline fast approaching I'd like some insight on this essay. I'm currently at 161 words, which is 11 words over the limit. I'm very appreciative to all that help. Thank you!

Tech's motto is Progress and Service.


We find that students who ultimately have a broad impact first had a significant one at home. What is your role in your immediate or extended family? And how have you seen evidence of your impact on them? (150 Words Max)


Patience.

The key trait in keeping the peace between my siblings and their daily deathmatches is patience. As the "assistant parent," I'm assigned to household chores such as washing dishes, cleaning the bathroom, and watching my siblings whilst my parents are at work; But, as the "referee," I'm forced to keep my brother from teasing my sister, my sister from annoying my brother, and stopping any physical altercation that threatens to emerge.

Recently, I've taken to using music as a means of intervention, specifically Jazz Rap.
After a particularly intense situation which involved tears being shed, I played one of my favorite songs "Shiki No Uta" by Nujabes for her. I told her, "If you ever feel stressed or angry, play this song to relax yourself." She thanked me, and I left her room. With college on the horizon I won't be home for long, but my hope is that this will prove to be a long-term solution while I'm away.
prismatiiic   
Dec 27, 2018
Scholarship / Why I want to study Portuguese in Brazil [4]

Hey Lee,
I like the essay but I feel as if you don't go in-depth enough on why it will contribute to your development as an officer. I see that you stated some examples, but you're not entirely answering the question. Perhaps, you should state why it would have such a profound effect on you as you grow in rank.

Also, in the first paragraph how about saying two or three other black students?
prismatiiic   
Dec 27, 2018
Undergraduate / I've done nothing but read for the past two summers. - Princeton Supplemental [4]

How have you spent the last two summers?



Hi, I'm applying to Princeton and with the deadline fast approaching I'd like some insight on this essay. I'm very appreciative to all that help. Thank you! I'm currently at 150 words.

Please tell us how you have spent the last two summers (or vacations between school years), including any jobs you have held. (Response required in about 150 words.)

Reading. Yes, that's right, I've done nothing but read for the past two summers. Summer is my escape from reality, the one time of the year where I have time for myself. Before junior year, I assisted in coordinating a children's Bible camp for the local churches in my area. My job? I would read and enact stories from the Bible for the children as they walked into my class overflowing with vigor. From there, I then formed a competition to see who retained the most knowledge. Then, last summer, aside from tutoring elementary school students and attending a week-long church camp myself, I immersed myself in manga. From the weekly chapters of ongoing Shonen to completed Seinen masterpieces such as Inio Asano's "Goodnight Punpun," I devoured every piece of writing that I laid eyes upon. Albeit not impressive, I completed 53 series ranging from short one-shots to 700-chapter behemoths.
prismatiiic   
Dec 28, 2018
Undergraduate / What is your role in your immediate family - GT Supplemental Essay [5]

Thank you for the suggestions, I've rewritten my essay and would like to know if it's fine now.

Patience.

The key trait in keeping the peace between my siblings and their daily deathmatches is patience. As the "assistant parent," I'm assigned to household chores such as washing dishes and cleaning the bathroom. As the "referee," I'm forced to stop any physical altercation that threatens to emerge whilst my parents are at work - which is easier said than done.

Recently, I've taken to using music as a means of intervention, specifically Jazz Rap. Report cards had released, and my brother was teasing her for getting a C in math. As she lunged at him, on the verge of tears, I told her to go to her room. I played one of my favorite songs "Shiki No Uta" by Nujabes and told her to listen to it whenever she needed to calm down. Today, when I see her angrily shut her door, I can faintly hear the opening lyrics play.
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