Harman8484
Feb 24, 2019
Writing Feedback / Some people think it is better for people to change their career at least once in their life [3]
You can rephrase the general statement like this: Switching jobs once and opting different work is advantageous as per some of the population.I agree with this notion and believe it helps in improvement of skills and develop a challenging attitude.
para 1: You have used the example in the second sentence. According to me you should use more general statement. Like: " People in a particular job tend to use a limited resource which is available there within, they need to explore more so that they can excel in their field."
A new working .... This sentence can be written as ""A new working environment can help us in getting to learn new techniques and practices which are available, which can further enhance our productivity.""
Their are grammatical mistakes in your sentences. You need to work on these.
For example, I came ...
For example, When i came to know about the option available in Microsoft Excel which i was unaware from my colleagues, i saved a considerable amount of time. Had i been working for the old employer i would have never learned about it and would still be working the old fashioned way.
In second paragraph you should give one example also to support your reason.
I am not a professional but here is my feedback. Hope it helps you achieve the target score. All the best and Thanks
You can rephrase the general statement like this: Switching jobs once and opting different work is advantageous as per some of the population.I agree with this notion and believe it helps in improvement of skills and develop a challenging attitude.
para 1: You have used the example in the second sentence. According to me you should use more general statement. Like: " People in a particular job tend to use a limited resource which is available there within, they need to explore more so that they can excel in their field."
A new working .... This sentence can be written as ""A new working environment can help us in getting to learn new techniques and practices which are available, which can further enhance our productivity.""
Their are grammatical mistakes in your sentences. You need to work on these.
For example, I came ...
For example, When i came to know about the option available in Microsoft Excel which i was unaware from my colleagues, i saved a considerable amount of time. Had i been working for the old employer i would have never learned about it and would still be working the old fashioned way.
In second paragraph you should give one example also to support your reason.
I am not a professional but here is my feedback. Hope it helps you achieve the target score. All the best and Thanks
