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Posts by baitassel
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baitassel   
Oct 24, 2009
Writing Feedback / Intrusive, friendly & polite; What are the qualities of a good neighbor.\? [3]

There are good expression in kazakh which says: "The best neighbors are those ones who have tall walls." I totally agree with that expression, because I would not prefer to be a friend to my neighbor. The qualityies of my good neighbor are intrusiveness, friendlyness and politeness.

To begin with, neighbors should not be intrusive. I do not like when neighbors ask the things which are not appropriate to ask. For example, once I had a neighbor, she knew everything about everybody, not only about others but also about me. Once my friend came when I was not at home, so that my friend decided to leave me a message to my neighbor for me. Then my neighbor started to tell thing about me which were not nice and most of them were false. I would rather to have a neighbor who did not gossip about me.

Futhermore, neighbors shoud be polite and friendly. There are a lot of situations such as when we need more sugar or oil, moreover when we are on vacation and there is nobody to leave our pets to. A good neghibor is that one who is glad to help me everytime. My present neighbor is very nice, she is always welcome to help. Because she knows one day she will need me to help to her.

Last bot not least, neighbors should be understandble. Once my uncle left me his children, there were three boys at age from 7 to 10. They made so much noise that I was embaressed. Next day I drop by my neighbor to give my excuse about last evening. Eventhough she has a light-sleep, she said that she heard nothing. She was understandble toward my noisy relatives.

All in all, I think that a good neighbors are those who do not ask for information that they are not suppose to know, those who understanble for some small accidents and those who are ready to help everytime.
baitassel   
Oct 25, 2009
Undergraduate / Libraries needing is necessary but sports activities can also help students. [3]

I would say that the essay score is weak 4, I cannot see the introduction part. Instead of saying in the beginning what do you prefer, try to give "hook" or background information, try to make a picture in grader's mind. Make sure that your that you understand the task, because in the conclusion you wrote that one spend on sport activities, next year on a library, the task was not about that, write an essay which is directly answer to task.
baitassel   
Oct 25, 2009
Writing Feedback / Eating at Home or at a Restaurant? I prefer HOME [8]

your essay score is weak 4.
good thing: organized, examples and supporting details
bad thing: missing capital letters, missing punctuations, grammar mistakes.
baitassel   
Oct 25, 2009
Writing Feedback / Why is music important to many people? [4]

The music takes a great part of people lives. If we go to the street, we can hear music from the cars, we can see jogging people with a player. Even when we stay in the line in a bank or a grocery store we can hear the music. Most people would say because the music became popular since it has been used in advertisement business. However, I believe the music takes a great part in people lives because it helps us to relax, to concentrate, to associate good times in our lives and to make our moods.

To begin with, the music delight the mood. Personally, when I am stressed out, I just listen to music and sigh aloud. It hepls me to washed out all bad emotions. Once in the internet I have read, that in Europe's fitness centers are becoming popular to visit "Music lessons". These lessoons are visited by stressed Europeans who study how correctly choose and sing the music when they are stressed out.

Furthermore, the music relaxes and concentrates people. Music concentrates people because the bites and rhytms. I have seen the movie "America spelling bee". The black girl had perepared for the "National Bee competition". Her teacher discovered that she could do her best, when she listen to tacts.

Last but not leats, the music reminisce the memories. Maybe because music is everywhere, maybe because we want to be mucis around us there is always music which reminds us the good moments in our lives.

All in all, parents listen to retro music to remember their adolscent time, teenagers listen to hip-hop music to relax and another ones listen to classic music to concentrate. There is always a different music for each of us and for each time in life. But reason is still the same, the music is taking a great part in our lives because it concentrates, reminds and delights our moods.
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