Beccalou
Oct 11, 2009
Undergraduate / making my college essay sing as loudly and well as I can. [4]
Edits and specific feedback if possible. Thanks in advance for your help!
FSU prompt: For almost one hundred years, the Latin words, "Vires, Artes, Mores" have been the guiding philosophy behind Florida State University. Vires signifies strength of all kinds - moral, physical, and intellectual; Artes alludes to the beauty of intellectual pursuits as exemplified in skill, craft, or art; and Mores refers to character, custom, or tradition. Describe how one or more of the values embodied in these concepts are reflected in your life (in 500 or less words).
Although my life has been consumed by Artes, without Vires to keep me physically strong and Mores keep me morally strong, I would not be able to maintain the balance necessary to become a self-sufficient, compassionate adult.
From the time I was an infant, my parents recognized my intense attraction to music. Before I could walk, my attention could be captured by a catchy jingle on the television or radio. In Kindergarten, I was the student who the teachers put in the front row at the microphone because I could carry a tune and remember the words to the songs in the school play. By the time I was 7 years old, I was entertaining and astounding adult audiences singing karaoke songs. One of my most exhilarating experiences was when I was eight years old and performed the National Anthem at a Florida Marlin's baseball game. As I stood there listening to the roaring applause, I knew that I had found my calling. From that point until now, I have pursued opportunities to perform and share my gift.
Voice performance is an ambitous master that teaches many lessons. It can humble the proud and teach you patience. It ensures you study and practice. It teaches you time management and self discipline. It teaches you perseverance and leadership. It can even teach you that sometimes life is not fair and that politics exist in all arenas.
My parents always taught me that disappointment was an opportunity to grow into a stronger person. If I did not get the part I tried out for, they would encourage me to take the smaller part and make it "memorable." They gave me their unconditional love and encouragement and taught me to never give up, and always take a chance. They were always proud of me and always came to every performance.
In addition to vocally performing in a wide variety of choral and drama groups, I have begun to take the opportunity to teach vocal techniques to others not only to improve their musical craft but to refine my own.
The three concepts Vires, Artes, and Mores go hand-in-hand with each other and together, create the ideal well-rounded human being. I believe that my determination and dedication in the arts, as well as in academics represent Florida State's motto. I have become a more independent person with a much stronger character. Without these guiding principles, I would not be the strong, talented individual that I am today.
Edits and specific feedback if possible. Thanks in advance for your help!
FSU prompt: For almost one hundred years, the Latin words, "Vires, Artes, Mores" have been the guiding philosophy behind Florida State University. Vires signifies strength of all kinds - moral, physical, and intellectual; Artes alludes to the beauty of intellectual pursuits as exemplified in skill, craft, or art; and Mores refers to character, custom, or tradition. Describe how one or more of the values embodied in these concepts are reflected in your life (in 500 or less words).
Although my life has been consumed by Artes, without Vires to keep me physically strong and Mores keep me morally strong, I would not be able to maintain the balance necessary to become a self-sufficient, compassionate adult.
From the time I was an infant, my parents recognized my intense attraction to music. Before I could walk, my attention could be captured by a catchy jingle on the television or radio. In Kindergarten, I was the student who the teachers put in the front row at the microphone because I could carry a tune and remember the words to the songs in the school play. By the time I was 7 years old, I was entertaining and astounding adult audiences singing karaoke songs. One of my most exhilarating experiences was when I was eight years old and performed the National Anthem at a Florida Marlin's baseball game. As I stood there listening to the roaring applause, I knew that I had found my calling. From that point until now, I have pursued opportunities to perform and share my gift.
Voice performance is an ambitous master that teaches many lessons. It can humble the proud and teach you patience. It ensures you study and practice. It teaches you time management and self discipline. It teaches you perseverance and leadership. It can even teach you that sometimes life is not fair and that politics exist in all arenas.
My parents always taught me that disappointment was an opportunity to grow into a stronger person. If I did not get the part I tried out for, they would encourage me to take the smaller part and make it "memorable." They gave me their unconditional love and encouragement and taught me to never give up, and always take a chance. They were always proud of me and always came to every performance.
In addition to vocally performing in a wide variety of choral and drama groups, I have begun to take the opportunity to teach vocal techniques to others not only to improve their musical craft but to refine my own.
The three concepts Vires, Artes, and Mores go hand-in-hand with each other and together, create the ideal well-rounded human being. I believe that my determination and dedication in the arts, as well as in academics represent Florida State's motto. I have become a more independent person with a much stronger character. Without these guiding principles, I would not be the strong, talented individual that I am today.