Undergraduate / Basketball has become an indispensable part of my life - Common app short essay [7]

My name is Trung . This is my short essay . Help me plz !

Basketball has become an indispensable part of my life. When I first picked up a real basketball at the age of 13, everything I knew about basketball was from a series of comic books: "Slam dunk". I only knew the characters' moves, and mimicked their actions. Yet even with my limited knowledge of the game, I loved basketball at first sight, and have played the game everyday ever since. I love the game because, when I play with my friends, or sometimes just alone, I feel very comfortable and refreshed. Basketball also teaches me how to cooperate well with others, to follow the rules and to have discipline. Moreover, the most important thing that I gain from playing basketball is fun. There are always many funny situations in a game. I remember one time when my teammate stepped on the ball and fell hilariously, no one could continue playing and rolled on the court laughing. Lots of fun I guess!

Critiques are welcomed !

Trung Pham