Writing Feedback / Task2: It is argued that because of globalisation we will lose our cultural identity [3]

There are a few mistakes in your essay :
- Secondly, globalization not only allows people to immerse ...
- ... distinguished local culture.... I think you mean " distinguishing" which is " distinctive". People use "distinguished" to describe a "successful and admired" person.
- ... contain with American popular culture .... The verb "contain" is not followed by any prepositions.
- ... movies filling with Indian .... You should use passive voice here.

Writing Feedback / Whether university students should study whatever they like or not [3]

Some grammartical and spelling errors are as follows :
- It should be "Whilst being able to choose subjects freely ... ".
- "receives".
- The verb "opt" usually goes with "for" (opt for sth)
- "...to strengthen their expertise." You 'd better use "improve" instead of "strengthen" in this context.
- "communication skills"
- "...ignore crutial ones..." I think you mean "crucial".
- " ... for the purpose is ...". You can't use verb to be here. Instead, you can use "for the purpose of", "with a view to","in order to".

- "... they are inadequate science ...". It is " ... they have inadequate..."