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maxsingh   
Jun 12, 2020
Writing Feedback / ielts task2 The animal species are becoming extinct due to human activities on land and in sea. [2]

The animal species are becoming extinct due to human activities on land and in sea. What are the reasons and solutions?

There is no doubt about that wildlife habitats are being destroyed and whole species of animals are on the verge of disappearance due to human activities on land as well as water. This essay will not solely highlight what are the reason behind this issue it will also provide some potential measure to resolve it.

There are two main reason why animals are disappearing. Firstly, in many parts of the world trees are being cut down to make a way for farmland on which to grow crops and keep animals. Such agriculture practices involve clearing huge plots of land inhabited by local fauna, resulting in the loss of habitats for the native animals. Secondly, over fishing is also responsible for the destruction of aquatic life as many fishermen prioritize profits to the detriments of the diversity of species. Many fish and other rare marine forms of life are trapped, which reduces biodiversity and has a devastating effect on the food chain of wildlife species. These circumstances are causing a considerable amount of damage to animal species.

Some solutions can be adopted to improve this situation. One approach is the implementation of hi-tech machinery and other technology breakthrough in the cultivation activities. Seeds with higher crop yield can be grown while powerful tractor can be applied to p lough the field in speedy manner, resulting in higher output and productivity and thus a lower demand for clearing more land for crop planting. Another measure is that government should impose strict fishing regulation, setting a limit of the catch fish or restricting access to aquatic areas with great biodiversity. This ensures that other wild sea animals would not be destroyed in the process

In conclusion, this essay highlighted that reasons behind this happening are deforestation and over fishing moreover this essay also represented that solutions to this issue are twofold enhancing technology related to cultivation and implementing laws pertaining to fishing which have been exemplified in the above paragraphs.
maxsingh   
Jun 13, 2020
Writing Feedback / Many items can be purchased on the Internet which is gradually becoming more popular than ever [5]

please make your thesis simple and clear

the rest of the essay is good but conclusion is bit shorter

you can add this :- even though, online shopping has some pros like cheap price ,huge discount which is extremely feasible for masses but it also has some obvious demerits which have been exemplified in the above paragraphs . From my perspective,it is certainly advantageous despite of few inevitable demerits.
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