Writing Feedback / Children learn to read words through only Online reading or printed materials? Essay Academic IELTS [2]

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Question:
Some people believe online reading materials should only be used for a child to learn to read, whereas others believe only printed material should be used.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

While internet should be the only platform to start learning activity due to its feature attracting students to learn enthusiastically, others believe that learning words through printed books might be better as to save children health from online device radiation.

The object animation of Internet might be considered as the beneficial factor to attract children to learn words. That is to say that children would be excited, thus focusing more on understanding the alphabet, when they see the alphabet being presented by moving cartoon in Internet. A piece of research by English Literature Students in Indonesia University in 2019 stated that cartoon body gesture in YouTube video captured children attention, hence, making them more active to respond the video by repeating the words. As a result, it enhanced their learning memory towards the words. I believe that such online learning platform could lead children to learn the words faster due to these attractive animations.

By contrast, learning to read words through printed books might keep serious harm to the children health. That is to say that children would not be exposed to any potential radiation from online screen, when they spend more time to learn many letters in printed books. Eventually, eye fatigue caused by radiation in Internet could be prevented to harm children eyes. In 2019, some research by public health students in Harvard university suggested that the absence of radiation from printed materials might sustain individuals good visibility, thereby making them able to concentrate on their materials. I think that learning through printed materials which preserves the health of children, thereby enabling them to concentrate on their next lessons outweighs the benefit of online animated objects.

In summary, the moving objects in online reading might result into having more children to be active in that platform, while learning through printed materials could not risk children to poor sight because of radiation posed by online screen, thereby making children to still have more capacity in learning other materials.

Writing Feedback / Protecting all or some wild animals. Essay writing task 2 Academic IELTS [4]

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Question :
Many people believe that we should protect all wild animals while others believe we should just protect some of them.

Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Although some community supports that all wild animals should be preserved as to broaden human's knowledge, others argue not to preserve certain ones posing threat to humans.

The proposition might claim that the protection of all wild animals could strengthen human's knowledge about the lives of such animals. This happens when all wild animals exist, human could understand each of this species' behaviour and the interaction to their kin, in which they can eventually exploit that insight to solve people's problems. A lion, the beast wild animals living in Forest, very often successfully catches their prey by working in a group, for example. Such behaviour could teach human about the advantage of solving problem together when being confronted with complex issue. Therefore, through conservation area, all of these wild animals could sustain their lives.

However, the opposite would argue that society should exclude certain wild animals, posing threat to human's lives. That is to say that, unlike the species of wild herbivore having no interest to injure human or sometimes avoiding people to save their lives, the wild beast such as tiger considers human as their prey and potentially kill them due to its nature as a carnivore. Eventually, society would live under the fear of unwanted attack from such animals. A Local News in India reported that the male tiger from deep forest, entering the small village at night, killed the boy. Such incident occurred when the boy walked and suddenly the tiger pounced this boy from behind. Thus, there would be no use of protecting such animals due to its threat to human.

In conclusion, I think that preserving all wild animals would be necessary, since there will be much useful insight being discovered once people study about their lives. However, society could improve the protection system to avoid such wild animal attack.