Writing Feedback / Problems of having domestic animals - IELTS task2 [5]

Hi! There's a wide range of vocabulary in your essay. Also, the reasons you give are pretty clear and persuasive.

However, the word "you" should be avoided in the essay :
" You have to bear in mind that " => this phrase creates an unpleasant feeling for those who read it
" you should prepare yourself for costs like..."

It's better to replace it by other words like : people, individual,....