Writing Feedback / {IELTS} Task 1: line and bar chart of monthly temperature and precipitation [3]

In the first sentence, I think it should be 'demonstrate' with no 's' in the end.
The second sentence should be in the past tense.

Writing Feedback / Task II- It is thought by some that it is better to live in a city while others disagree [4]

I think that 'always' is not suitable for an IELTS writing essay.
'social clubs'
'city lives lack both entertainment .... You mean countryside lives ?