Posts by mbotchway

mbotchway

Sep 10, 2020

Writing Feedback / Writing task 2: procedure of getting a driving license [2]

Great job with your transitional words, I like how your essay is straight to the point. I'm impressed you used complex sentence at the beginning of your essay; it makes your essay stand out more. Great vocabulary, however I would like you to reduce the use of words like (get, go, then, going, take, is, so, are, part). I suggest you change can not to cannot, and replace for With about. Overall, the essay is great!

mbotchway

Sep 10, 2020

Scholarship / QuestBridge - Tell us about your proudest moment and what it says about you.. [3]

My proudest moment - for QuestBridge

My proudest moment was when I scored the highest on an Algebra II quiz in my class, my junior year. It was an open notebook quiz, however, I challenged myself to do the work without the help of my notebook to see whether I was intellectually capable of taking the class. I was very anxious, with a red hot face - and as a result, I did not want to turn in my work. I encouraged myself to be confident since it was just a test, and if I failed, I still had the chance to work harder. Consequently, as the results arrived I was very nervous to see my grade that I lost appetite the whole day till I got my score. Fortunately, I scored a hundred percent which made me relieved and extremely happy that I showed my grade to all my colleagues and my parents when they asked about it -I could not take my eyes off my paper the rest of the day.

Hi! I am not confident about this essay. Can you help me by reviewing and giving me a detailed feedback on how this essay went from your perspective, and what to change?

Thanks for reading!