eric412
Oct 18, 2009
Undergraduate / "leaving the gym after a solid workout" - common app short answer critique [4]
I have two which are similar:
Required In the space provided below, please elaborate on one of your activities (extracurricular, personal activities, or work experience)(150 words or fewer).
#1 There is no better feeling than leaving the gym after a solid workout. Growing up, it has always been important for me to stay fit by playing sports. Over the past several months I have been working hard at the gym to build myself stronger both physically and mentally. The physical results of working out requires much dedication, determination, desire, discipline, and of course time to develop. Moreover I noticed where I gained the quickest and most dramatic results, in my mind. The psychological results result in an improved mood, Now, everyday, I walk out of the gym with a smile on my face. I am grateful I got into this activity because it a great way for me to relieve stress and even boost self confidence. With a dedicated mindset and assistance from close friends I will be pushing myself to incorporate working out as a lifetime hobby.
#2 There is no better feeling than leaving the gym after a solid workout. Growing up, it has always been important for me to stay fit by playing sports. Over the past several months I have been working hard at the gym to build myself stronger both physically and mentally. As the visual results of working out take time to develop, it has forced the dedication within me to come out and challenge me. I noticed how such a hobby can have an affect on my mind so quickly. Now, everyday, I walk out of the gym fulfilled and eager to return. I am grateful I got into this activity because it a great way for me to relieve stress and even boost self confidence. With a dedicated mindset and assistance from close friends I will be pushing myself to incorporate working out as a lifetime hobby.
please tear this apart!!!
Thank you in advance!!
I have two which are similar:
Required In the space provided below, please elaborate on one of your activities (extracurricular, personal activities, or work experience)(150 words or fewer).
#1 There is no better feeling than leaving the gym after a solid workout. Growing up, it has always been important for me to stay fit by playing sports. Over the past several months I have been working hard at the gym to build myself stronger both physically and mentally. The physical results of working out requires much dedication, determination, desire, discipline, and of course time to develop. Moreover I noticed where I gained the quickest and most dramatic results, in my mind. The psychological results result in an improved mood, Now, everyday, I walk out of the gym with a smile on my face. I am grateful I got into this activity because it a great way for me to relieve stress and even boost self confidence. With a dedicated mindset and assistance from close friends I will be pushing myself to incorporate working out as a lifetime hobby.
#2 There is no better feeling than leaving the gym after a solid workout. Growing up, it has always been important for me to stay fit by playing sports. Over the past several months I have been working hard at the gym to build myself stronger both physically and mentally. As the visual results of working out take time to develop, it has forced the dedication within me to come out and challenge me. I noticed how such a hobby can have an affect on my mind so quickly. Now, everyday, I walk out of the gym fulfilled and eager to return. I am grateful I got into this activity because it a great way for me to relieve stress and even boost self confidence. With a dedicated mindset and assistance from close friends I will be pushing myself to incorporate working out as a lifetime hobby.
please tear this apart!!!
Thank you in advance!!
