Writing Feedback / Mobile phone merits and defects. [3]

Hey, could you please help check the grammar and add some comments of what you think of my essay. This is first time I write paper. I just practice writing for improve English skill.

The mobile phone has been affecting our life. Some people think that mobile phone is precondition. But others do not agree the idea, they insist that mobile phone should be banned in public places, because using of mobile phone in public places disturb others. In this paper, the advantage and the disadvantage will be discussed.

There is no doubt that mobile phone is the most fast and convenient means of communication. Many people think that mobile phone is much more than a means of communication.

While is has lots of merits, it also bring about lots of problems. Using of mobile phone in public places irritates other people. When they on the phone, they never concern about other's mood. Moreover mobile phone's electron wave leads to machine malfunction that cause big disasters such as air crash.

In conclusion, mobile phone user should learn to more considerate and observe some common rules of etiquette.

Writing Feedback / Even though some of the ads are beneficent, we should have discretion for national purchase [4]

We live in the Era of chaotic information. There is no doubt that advertisement has been spreaded anywhere, which influence our life directly and in directly. This essay intends to examine merits and demerits of advertisement.

One of the strongest arguments in favor of the merits of advertisement is that it offers a lot of information, which provides opportunities, be able to purchase cheap and low goods.

In contrast, there are several arguments against the merits of advertisement. To begin with, it disguises as if goods cheap and necessary. Moreover, some advertisements targeting children can mislead children to pester their parents to purchase. As a result, consumers commit over-consumption, which waste a large amount of money. What is more, this causes not only materialism but also mammonism.

In conclusion, even though some of the advertisement is beneficent, we should have discretion for national purchase.