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justdoit   
Oct 27, 2009
Undergraduate / "Asian American living in a city" - common app diversity essay [3]

tell me what you think
im writing more as i go
but this is what i have so far
(the ____ is exact places/names i want to keep it private haha)

City Living of an Asian-American Student



Trying to think of a good essay topic has been very frustrating yet enlightening. I sat in front of my computer for hours, just pondering about my life. What is so distinct about my life? How I am I different? I spent days looking at a blank Microsoft Word Document. I kept on looking for big ideas, but I realized what really matters are the small aspects of my life that have been unnoticed or simply ignored. I have always thought of myself as an average high school student, but, in actuality, no one can ever be under the same circumstances or have the same experiences as me. I now appreciate the distinctiveness of my life. I am an Asian American living in a city that is nicknamed the "Hick town of Seminole County." I play soccer and volleyball at a big football school. I am an honor student whose friends are mostly "meathead jocks." I dress in Ralph Lauren Polos and button down shirts, while camouflage and Guy Harvey fishing shirts swarm the Oviedo High School campus. To top that off, my name is Hyung-jin Kim. According to howmanyofme, it is estimated that there is one or fewer people in the U.S. with my exact name. Of course, it is just an estimation, for I don't think there can be less than one person, unless I am not alive. But something I am absolutely sure of is that I tend to stick out at my school. I am a yellow corn kernel in a big bowl of white flour, literally. My everyday experiences, especially as an Asian American in a primarily Caucasian community, has created a personality and attitude that keeps me open and optimistic.

I was born in Seoul, South Korea. My family immigrated to the U.S. when I was 5. Living in a new country at that age is like moving to a different planet. I didn't know the language, the people looked much different, and I was just plain scared. I can recall many nights when I cried to my mom, begging her to move back home. As a child, I was shy and extremely self-conscious. To exacerbate problems, I was terrorized by jokes about my facial features, which were often followed by chants of ching chong chang. Half the time I did not even understand what they were saying, I just knew it was something bad. I slowly became completely fluent in English and graduated from ESOL in the fourth grade. As I became a fluent speaker, I started opening up to more of my peers. Now as a senior in high school, friends and teachers laugh at the thought of me being shy and not talking. Although the Asian jokes keep coming, I have learned to take them less to heart. Criticism is not a weakness; it is strength. Disparaging comments have no negative effect on myself. I take it and occasionally learn from them. My ethnicity and culture is something I am proud of, not ashamed of. With my ethnicity comes a unique name, at least by American standards. The perplexed expression of a new or substitute teacher trying to call roll always gives me a good laugh. H.. Hu.. Hiyoung jin? I would politely correct them and tell them it is pronounced Hung-jin. My social skills have been given a tremendous boost because of my name. My name has given me multiple opportunities to talk and befriend completely random strangers. Because I am the senior anchor on my school's news, everyone recognizes me: teachers, students and administrators. There is never a day I don't meet a new person. It has transformed my old feeble self, that couldn't speak any English, into an individual that can easily speak to a complete stranger as though he/she is an old friend.

My life is literally a once in a lifetime experience. Every day I have numerous encounters that shape who I am and who I will become. Experiences in everyday life can either be negative or positive; it just depends on one's outlook. I believe that I will go on no matter how bleak the situation may seem. My ability to cope with confrontations will benefit my college experience by keeping me pushing toward achievement even when it seems I will falter. The road is not always paved with gold. There will always be some potholes along the way. Just because there is a little dent in the path, doesn't mean I have to stop. My experiences throughout my life have taught me to keep my foot on the gas even though the road seems to be rough and beaten up. On my road in life, I hope that Cornell University is one of the pit stops along the way to success.
justdoit   
Oct 29, 2009
Undergraduate / University of Florida Essay..can any one help me? [4]

dont go overboard and make up a crazy story
just make it believable
but if i were you i would just write about something true
cus you would knwo the most about it
unless ur a really good fiction writer
justdoit   
Oct 29, 2009
Undergraduate / "Survivial of the Fittest" - UCF ESSAY - BUMP IN THE ROAD [3]

Our speech course began with tests on personality types and learning styles to help us gauge our true selves in hopes of find a major that best matched us.

this sentence is kind of confusing
mess around with it a lil bit

other than let ur english teacher work out the lil grammatical errors on it
overall good idea and essay though
justdoit   
Oct 29, 2009
Undergraduate / Making smiles cornelll hotel supplement essay. [3]

What is the first thing that usually comes to mind about Orlando, Florida? Disney World. Growing up in Central Florida means that you have to make the almost religious trip to one of the parks. Being surrounded by tourism has given me the opportunity to see the beaming faces of both the young and old tourists. Through the Cornell University: School of Hotel Administration, I will be able to obtain a career that help people create memories that last a lifetime.

My time in the Video Productions program at my school made me realize the thing I love most. I love making people laugh and be happy. To me, giving another person happiness is a gift that is priceless. Because of my experiences through WROR TV, I have become a more sociable person. I am the senior anchor, and I am also a producer and host of my own segment. As the anchor, I joke around and sometimes make a fool out of myself for the amusement of others. When I anchor, I broadcast throughout the whole school, but I am speaking indirectly to the viewers because I am actually looking and talking to the camera. On the other hand my segment calls for me to go to random students around campus and ask them a question face to face. At first, I was really nervous, talking to a camera is one thing but talking to a real person is a completely different story. I felt awkward and shy talking and filming to complete strangers, at first. As I slowly became accustomed to it, I develop into a much more animated host. I have matured in to a better speaker and a more open individual. These skills will help my profession since my job will require me to speak and help complete strangers.

Keeping up with academics and balancing sports, clubs, community service, Video Production projects and orchestra has compelled me to develop time management skills. Every night I stayed up late with what seemed an almost insurmountable pile of homework. I learned to do work little by little in whatever down time I had. For example, I would have like 10 minutes before volleyball practice everyday. The year before I used that time to socialize. My junior year I used to cut down on my ever-growing forest of homework. This will reflect on my success at the School of Hotel Administration for I have the skills needed to schedule a plan and finish my objectives.

A cheap plane ticket from Orlando, Florida to Ithaca, New York is around 200 dollars. The tuition at Cornell University is $36,300. But the chance to graduate from the Cornell University School of Hotel Administration and have a career making smiles and memories is absolutely priceless.
justdoit   
Oct 30, 2009
Undergraduate / Making smiles cornelll hotel supplement essay. [3]

(changed last paragraph)

The School of Hotel Administration will allow me to work with a diverse group of people. A job in this field can accredit a chance to work with an array of people. This profession will permit me to connect witch people from all corners of the world. A cheap plane ticket from Orlando, Florida to Ithaca, New York is around 200 dollars. The tuition at Cornell University is $36,300. But the chance to graduate from the Cornell University School of Hotel Administration and have a career making smiles and memories is absolutely priceless.

i did the commercial thing on purpose
i like it but shuold i take it out
or leave it
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