Icy
Jun 21, 2022
Writing Feedback / Opportunity to observe his motivation, personality and work ethic. LoR on behalf of Supervisor. [2]
Hello Reviewers, I want a LOR from my previous supervisor under whom I have done my one-year internship. As he was very busy these days, he asked me to prepare an initial draft and mail him a copy of this draft. Actually, I want a very formal & official tone in LOR and prepared some starting paragraphs. Please suggest me which is better and I know there are some corrections (in an overall sense, punctuations, etc., etc.), please correct them also. Consider this as a request from me.
I am writing this reference at the request of Mr. XXX, who is applying for the YYY Program. I have known Mr. XXX for the past one and half year in my capacity as the Director at Technical Division of ZZZ Organisation. He has worked under my direct supervision as an Intern for one year and I therefore had ample opportunity to observe his motivation, personality and work ethic.
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I am writing this reference at the request of Mr. XXX, who is applying for the YYY Program. I have known Mr. XXX for the past one and half year in my capacity as the Director at Technical Division of ZZZ Organisation. As Mr. XXX's sole direct supervisor during his one-year internship at ZZZ Organisation, I had ample opportunity to observe his motivation, personality and work ethic.
Hello Reviewers, I want a LOR from my previous supervisor under whom I have done my one-year internship. As he was very busy these days, he asked me to prepare an initial draft and mail him a copy of this draft. Actually, I want a very formal & official tone in LOR and prepared some starting paragraphs. Please suggest me which is better and I know there are some corrections (in an overall sense, punctuations, etc., etc.), please correct them also. Consider this as a request from me.
LoR on behalf of Supervisor
I am writing this reference at the request of Mr. XXX, who is applying for the YYY Program. I have known Mr. XXX for the past one and half year in my capacity as the Director at Technical Division of ZZZ Organisation. He has worked under my direct supervision as an Intern for one year and I therefore had ample opportunity to observe his motivation, personality and work ethic.
OR
I am writing this reference at the request of Mr. XXX, who is applying for the YYY Program. I have known Mr. XXX for the past one and half year in my capacity as the Director at Technical Division of ZZZ Organisation. As Mr. XXX's sole direct supervisor during his one-year internship at ZZZ Organisation, I had ample opportunity to observe his motivation, personality and work ethic.