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Aug 5, 2022
Writing Feedback / The table below gives information about the problems faced by children in two primary schools in 200 [3]
The chart illustrates the proportion of pupils who confront different types of education issues in two primary schools between 2005 and 2015. Overall, it is clear that school A had higher proportions of children experiencing education problems than school B in both years. However, school A managed to reduce the number of students with those difficulties, school B saw an increase in the percentage of pupils who were struggling.
In 2005, 42% of children in school A found it difficult to follow instructions, whereas only 6% of pupils in school B experienced this problem. Besides, between 30% and 40% of students struggled with spelling, listening skills, verbal expression, and concentration in lessons in school A, while the equivalent figure for school B was between 5 and 15%.
In 2015, the number of students in school A facing the following instructions problem decreased significantly to 18%, and this school also saw a rapid diminish in spelling, listening skills, verbal expression, and concentration in lessons by 5%, 15%, 14%, and 24% respectively. By contrast, in school B, the percentage of pupils confronted with spelling, and following instructions issues doubled, to 10% and 12% correspondently, and there was almost no change in the incidence of listening skills, verbal expression, or concentration difficulties.
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pupils issues ANALYSIS
The chart illustrates the proportion of pupils who confront different types of education issues in two primary schools between 2005 and 2015. Overall, it is clear that school A had higher proportions of children experiencing education problems than school B in both years. However, school A managed to reduce the number of students with those difficulties, school B saw an increase in the percentage of pupils who were struggling.
In 2005, 42% of children in school A found it difficult to follow instructions, whereas only 6% of pupils in school B experienced this problem. Besides, between 30% and 40% of students struggled with spelling, listening skills, verbal expression, and concentration in lessons in school A, while the equivalent figure for school B was between 5 and 15%.
In 2015, the number of students in school A facing the following instructions problem decreased significantly to 18%, and this school also saw a rapid diminish in spelling, listening skills, verbal expression, and concentration in lessons by 5%, 15%, 14%, and 24% respectively. By contrast, in school B, the percentage of pupils confronted with spelling, and following instructions issues doubled, to 10% and 12% correspondently, and there was almost no change in the incidence of listening skills, verbal expression, or concentration difficulties.
i've just been starting to write for 2 months, hope you could give me a feedback of this one. thanks a lot.