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Sep 6, 2023
Undergraduate / Rubber Bands College Essay INTRO paragraph [2]
I carefully pulled back on each strand, ensuring that I was firm yet delicate, before releasing them into the stars. I love rubber bands. In fact, I had always found them fascinating. I admired their tenacity. As I showed my latest rubber band launcher to my grade school friends, a sense of fulfillment would overcome me. More than just actions, I resonated with rubber bands on a personal level. Like rubber bands, I was flexible: willing to do whatever the crowd would. Like rubber bands, I was always comfortable and resistant to change. Like rubber bands, I too became brittle over time. But, in sophomore year, as I walked into my physics classroom for the first time, I felt as though the elasticity within me had been vacuum sealed forever. Because although I had always been brittle, flexible, and resistant to change like rubber bands, I adopted a new trait: resilience - a trait that would change my life forever.
Above is the introduction to my college essay. I am considering scrapping the whole thing as I was told that extended metaphors are oversaturated and rarely good + not worth the risk. Any feedback would be appreciated. Tear it apart pls :)
college essay introduction
I carefully pulled back on each strand, ensuring that I was firm yet delicate, before releasing them into the stars. I love rubber bands. In fact, I had always found them fascinating. I admired their tenacity. As I showed my latest rubber band launcher to my grade school friends, a sense of fulfillment would overcome me. More than just actions, I resonated with rubber bands on a personal level. Like rubber bands, I was flexible: willing to do whatever the crowd would. Like rubber bands, I was always comfortable and resistant to change. Like rubber bands, I too became brittle over time. But, in sophomore year, as I walked into my physics classroom for the first time, I felt as though the elasticity within me had been vacuum sealed forever. Because although I had always been brittle, flexible, and resistant to change like rubber bands, I adopted a new trait: resilience - a trait that would change my life forever.
Above is the introduction to my college essay. I am considering scrapping the whole thing as I was told that extended metaphors are oversaturated and rarely good + not worth the risk. Any feedback would be appreciated. Tear it apart pls :)