freeman8899
Nov 22, 2009
Undergraduate / How the zeigeist of my class has shaped me. [3]
I like this essay. It has a nice flow from beginning to end.
A few things:
Try not to use the word big. (Big dreams, high standards in first paragraph. Ambitious, maybe?)
Overnight trips was used a little too much to my liking. Switch it around.
As for your GPA, I think it would be better to give them a solid number. 'High GPA' means different things to different people. Your transcript will reflect it, but it's nice to emphasize it in your essay.
I like this essay. It has a nice flow from beginning to end.
A few things:
Try not to use the word big. (Big dreams, high standards in first paragraph. Ambitious, maybe?)
Overnight trips was used a little too much to my liking. Switch it around.
As for your GPA, I think it would be better to give them a solid number. 'High GPA' means different things to different people. Your transcript will reflect it, but it's nice to emphasize it in your essay.