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Nov 22, 2009
Undergraduate / How the zeigeist of my class has shaped me. [3]

I like this essay. It has a nice flow from beginning to end.

A few things:

Try not to use the word big. (Big dreams, high standards in first paragraph. Ambitious, maybe?)

Overnight trips was used a little too much to my liking. Switch it around.

As for your GPA, I think it would be better to give them a solid number. 'High GPA' means different things to different people. Your transcript will reflect it, but it's nice to emphasize it in your essay.
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