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Posts by Eleana
Name: Eva Sinaga
Joined: Feb 1, 2025
Last Post: Feb 15, 2025
Threads: 2
Posts: 4  
From: Indonesia
School: IPEKA Christian School Grand Wisata

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Eleana   
Feb 1, 2025
Undergraduate / From Acting to Action: How Theater Shaped My Path to Management - UBC Personal Profile [3]

Tell us more about ONE or TWO activities listed above that are most important to you. Please explain the role you played and what you learned in the process. You will be asked for a reference who can speak to your response. (Maximum 2100 characters)

If I could choose only one activity, I would say the theater club. In tenth grade, I joined this school group because I wanted to try something new and be directly involved in role-playing, inspired by their previous performance. After joining, the mentors taught me how to express emotions properly, do vocal warm-ups, and perform body movements. But over time, my motivation turned into an ambition to get the lead role, which would be performed at one of the largest school events. I auditioned and was chosen for the lead role, Hannah, a woman searching for true love while waiting for her father to return.

Playing Hannah was challenging because her character faced family conflicts while being in a romantic relationship. So, I had to be braver to perform in public, memorize many lines, and even show both anger and love at the same time.

When I first rehearsed as Hannah, I clearly remember being awkward with a senior as "my boyfriend." But, we overcame this discomfort by spending more time together, and we're now close friends. I also made many friendships, especially among the seniors through this club. There was even a final scene of Hannah crying due to the climax conflict with her mom and the breakup with Hannah's boyfriend. The crying scene was really difficult because I couldn't fully immerse myself in the character. Although I was scared, I overcame this by practicing consistently and was finally able to cry in front of more than 100 people on the day of the performance.

The outstanding performance inspired many audience members, leading more students to join the club. This unforgettable experience has helped me develop my networking, adaptability, and problem-solving skills which will be the key for my Management studies at UBC. I'm excited about having an opportunity to join the UBC Players Club, where I can continue improving my performance skills while studying at UBC.

Hello, everyone! This is my essay, and I hope you can provide any advice or tips to help me perfect it. Please also rate it from 1 to 10. Thank you!

Just to clarify, this is one of the questions asked for the UBC Personal Profile. I've connected my experience in the theater club with my passion and my choice of Management major, and I've explained the reasons deeper in my other essays that address the remaining questions. So, please don't be confused!^^

Eleana   
Feb 1, 2025
Scholarship / GkS Graduate Scholarship For Master's Degree In Early Child Education [4]

If you look at the other examples of GKS personal statements, most of them are written in a neat format. So, I suggest you to revise your personal statement. Also, I consider that you only mentioned why you think GKS will help you achieve your goal, meanwhile, it's also essential to explain which university you choose and how that university provides your needs on studying Early Childhood Education. I hope this advice can help you!
Eleana   
Feb 1, 2025
Student Talk / I am a bit shy, when I have to speak in English, I always worry about my mistakes; I lack confidence [41]

Wow, there are so many people supporting you! Cheer up!!! I believe you can do better with practice because I face the same thing, and I think it's important to have a native speaker friend, or at least a friend who speaks English well. As you talk with them, try to be confident and listen to all the corrections they give you. I hope both of us can develop our English skills :)
Eleana   
Feb 15, 2025
Undergraduate / Friendship: Is It Really THAT IMPORTANT? - UBC Personal Profile [2]

What's important to you? Why? (maximum 1,500 characters)

"Please form groups to complete the task," said my English teacher one day. While my classmates were busy setting up their teams, no one asked me to join. "Again? This is the fourth time I've been left out," I thought, and I ended up joining the leftover friends as if nothing had happened. That night, I couldn't hide my disappointment and called my best friend, Gizelle. "It's okay. I know how you feel," she said. Her simple words made me cry yet gave me relief. She even told me to reflect on whether I had made any mistakes. My other close friends also comforted me, which made me feel motivated to take action. After that, I talked to my parents who supported me, and discussed it with the class supervisor.

As time went by, I realized it was just a misunderstanding. Back then, I spent most of my break time or time after school ended with close friends from another class. However, I had never made an effort to socialize with my classmates and only focused on Q&A sessions with my teacher during lessons. Because of my close friends' support, I finally found the courage to resolve the problem by becoming more outgoing and helping others. After seven months, I've built a strong relationship with my peers and no longer struggle with joining teams for school assignments.

Like Gizelle, who always supports me in every situation and advises me when I'm wrong, I believe true communication and balanced friendships not only comfort me but also help me grow and connect with others.

*My essay contains 1,490 characters
Eleana   
Feb 15, 2025
Scholarship / Master of Public Policy (MPP) - Manaaki scholarship [6]

Hi Febri! I think you are really good on mentioning many things you want to learn. However, despite just mentioning all things A, B, C, etc., I suggest explaining the reason for each one. You can also revise the flow to make your answer smoother so that each sentence connects better.
Eleana   
Feb 15, 2025
Scholarship / Education in Biology - to achieve scholarship in DGIST [5]

When I first read your essay, the first opinion that came to my mind was that it wasn't very engaging, as it repeatedly followed the same format "My ...... is..... because...." I highly recommend you adding more variety to capture readers' attention. It would be much better if you could create a strong first impression with your opening sentence. Additionally, you listed all your achievements without explaining your personal growth or what you learned from those experiences. REMEMBER, you should write an ESSAY, not a CV!!! This is ONE OF THE MOST COMMON reasons why people fail to get accepted into their dream university. Make sure your essay has a good flow as you explain your growth in a storytelling manner. Hope this helps you :)
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