Undergraduate / writing poems + engineering studie - USC, short Essays [5]

hi,
I am an international student from Turkey, because English is my second foreign language (first French) I have difficulties to write adequate essays for undergraduate admissions. Can you help me, and revise&correct my essays?

Thanks

Tell us about an activity that is important to you, and why. Please feel free to talk about an activity other than one you may have discussed in your essay.

Writing poems or articles are really important for me because I think that we should balance theoretical studies mentally. Selection of words and sentences makes on brain to work harder while writing poems or articles. However we do not think essentially during learning a subject lesson. This thinking is the one which increases the creativity. Whatever work you do, the creativity will be always the most important trump that you have and this trump will serve you to come to the fore in your area. Writing also takes you from the social problems into a utopian world in that you can reach to absolute freedom and this freedom relaxes you mentally. This is why, I always feel good after writing something.

Describe your academic interests and how you plan to pursue them at USC. Please feel free to address your first- and second-choice major selections.

I can say that my interest to space directs me on aerospace engineering studies. The reason of my first choice is engineering instead of astronomy or astrophysics is that, over the years I realized that I am more successful in practical solutions or applications in lieu of theoretical studies. I stand academically in the forefront in project centered topics more than school lessons and this brings my achievements. In fact, I always feel good in the projects that I lead or in the ones that I participate as a member. Therefore, if I am accepted to USC, I will especially be interested in Design/Build/Fly team and new robotics team for special hobby robots designed for space technologies, because I see that in twenty years, there will be daily aero transportation systems so we have to be specialized in this area.

Undergraduate / From Turkey, complex life - Stanford-short essay [9]

Virtually all of Stanford's undergraduates live on campus. What would you want your freshman year roommate to know about you? Tell us something about you that will help your roommate-and us-know you better.

Although I am applying from Turkey, my family who has Uighur and Uzbek roots immigrated to Turkey in 1997 from East Turkistan which is an autonomous region belonged to China. Due to some problems and events happened before; many Uighurs could not be friends with Chinese people. People were afraid of soldiers and we were told not to talk to Chinese people. Despite of these social pressures, I was studied in a Chinese school because its' education quality was better than Uighur schools and my best friends were Chinese. I think that friendship should not evaluate as political views. I liked them personally.

When we came to Turkey, I could not start school on time because I was not a Turkish citizen. As a result of my father's endeavor, I could start with a condition; I should learn Turkish. However I got an achievement that they had never expected. I graduated from primary school with 1st degree and ranked 128th in national exam among 800.000 candidates. In secondary school, I was learning French, also my environment had changed again. I had worked with almost all kind of people in my life.

My life is as complex and difficult as like that. Social pressures, political views could not intimidate me and I tried to prove myself in each place. I think I achieved. My good communication skills and dealing bravely with difficulties are the main factors which made me stronger. I think I can concord with anyone because I do not look people's race or religion. The only problem that could occur between me and my roommate is the soccer or the basketball team we support. I will look over my roommate's hobbies because these reflect passions and treats of him and I will catch minimum discord. I believe that the first person I can trust would definitely be my roommate.

It has only 1800 character limit, that's why I can't talk about more special about our relations.

Should I omit a paragraph to write more about my roommate and myself?