mustafa_hussain
Dec 3, 2009
Writing Feedback / Monologue Writing about Monica [9]
I hope Monica has made something good for dinner. Today's day at work was extremely tiresome. My boss had gone mad; he handed me piles of papers to type. It's so hot, I need to get the car air conditioner fixed. Oh no! The windows is jammed too. Monica's birthday is even cuming up, I need to think of something to gift her. Oh there is some mail for me in the mail box! Why does the house seem so creepy tonight. The grass needs trimming. I'll trim it tomorrow. The lights are even fused. Friday ruined by my boss and Saturday ruined by my house chores! I don't even remember the last time me and Monica watched a movie together. This door mat need cleaning. Pluto walked on it with muddy paws. Oh look here he comes running to me! Wow Monica is looking really good in her new dress. Why are the lites dimmed. Oh no! I forgot it's my anniversary. Oh there is a candle on the dining table. Wow Monica has pput in so much effort to set this place up. It looks so romantic! Oh its my favourite dish for dinner. Chicken Lasania. It looks so marvelous today. The sell of cheese and spices in it. The pieces of chicken look so soft and juicy. Wow the blue lenses look really good on Monica. They match perfectly with her dress. Even Pluto got his favorite today, boiled meat. He is looking so cute while eating it. Monica is a great cook. She has made this dish so yummy. I feel sorry I didn't even remember our anniversary and she did so much. Let me take her to her favorite ice cream parlor and we'll go for a long drive after that. I've got loads of things to talk about with Monica. We even have to plan our honey moon. We haven't gotten any time to stay with each other lately.
My first Monologue! Please comment and tell me how can I improve on it.
I hope Monica has made something good for dinner. Today's day at work was extremely tiresome. My boss had gone mad; he handed me piles of papers to type. It's so hot, I need to get the car air conditioner fixed. Oh no! The windows is jammed too. Monica's birthday is even cuming up, I need to think of something to gift her. Oh there is some mail for me in the mail box! Why does the house seem so creepy tonight. The grass needs trimming. I'll trim it tomorrow. The lights are even fused. Friday ruined by my boss and Saturday ruined by my house chores! I don't even remember the last time me and Monica watched a movie together. This door mat need cleaning. Pluto walked on it with muddy paws. Oh look here he comes running to me! Wow Monica is looking really good in her new dress. Why are the lites dimmed. Oh no! I forgot it's my anniversary. Oh there is a candle on the dining table. Wow Monica has pput in so much effort to set this place up. It looks so romantic! Oh its my favourite dish for dinner. Chicken Lasania. It looks so marvelous today. The sell of cheese and spices in it. The pieces of chicken look so soft and juicy. Wow the blue lenses look really good on Monica. They match perfectly with her dress. Even Pluto got his favorite today, boiled meat. He is looking so cute while eating it. Monica is a great cook. She has made this dish so yummy. I feel sorry I didn't even remember our anniversary and she did so much. Let me take her to her favorite ice cream parlor and we'll go for a long drive after that. I've got loads of things to talk about with Monica. We even have to plan our honey moon. We haven't gotten any time to stay with each other lately.
My first Monologue! Please comment and tell me how can I improve on it.