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Nov 30, 2009
Undergraduate / "My dream was to become a millionaire" - UC Prompt [3]

I'm kind of new at this so I am sorry if this is not very helpful, but i noticed a couple of things that don't sound correct.

- "In Phi Phi Island, the entire villages looked like a huge trash." I'm not quite sure what you are trying to say but I'm guessing its "like a huge piece of trash" or a "huge trash dump" but what you have now does not sound correct

- "Despite of my desire to jump right into" should be "Despite of my desire to jump right into" or "In despite of my desire to jump right into"

I hope that helps some.
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