chango
Nov 30, 2009
Undergraduate / "My dream was to become a millionaire" - UC Prompt [3]
I'm kind of new at this so I am sorry if this is not very helpful, but i noticed a couple of things that don't sound correct.
- "In Phi Phi Island, the entire villages looked like a huge trash." I'm not quite sure what you are trying to say but I'm guessing its "like a huge piece of trash" or a "huge trash dump" but what you have now does not sound correct
- "Despite of my desire to jump right into" should be "Despiteof my desire to jump right into" or "In despite of my desire to jump right into"
I hope that helps some.
I'm kind of new at this so I am sorry if this is not very helpful, but i noticed a couple of things that don't sound correct.
- "In Phi Phi Island, the entire villages looked like a huge trash." I'm not quite sure what you are trying to say but I'm guessing its "like a huge piece of trash" or a "huge trash dump" but what you have now does not sound correct
- "Despite of my desire to jump right into" should be "Despite
I hope that helps some.