JinZheyu
Dec 1, 2009
Graduate / Personal Statement, Computer Science; 'I was the top one among students' [2]
Personal Statement Topic
Explain your purpose for graduate study, including your current degree goals and reasons for selecting a particular field of study.
Their request is stated above, and the total length should not exceed 4000 characters.It's my first time to write PS, could you give some suggestions to improve my essay or just refine it by correcting exotic expressions into idioms of English?
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In return for the hardworking in high school, I was the top one among students who entered AN_UNIVERSITY from A_PROVINCE (a little bit larger than Washington State of U.S., with population of 27 million) and ranked 86th place in the College Entrance Examination of A_PROVINCE, China. As a smart and curious freshman three years ago, becoming a computer scientist to lead the cutting-edge and working with brilliant colleagues from all over the world has been a romantic dream of mine. My years in college encouraged me to further my study in a world-class university and earn a Master, even a PhD degree after graduation. Although my exact research goals are yet to be refined, my interests include distributed systems and artificial intelligence.
Though I had no idea about my specific academic interest at the beginning of my college years, terms like ANN, cloud computing and distributed systems has gradually leaded me to a fantastic world of computer science and technologies. I remember it was in the summer of my sophomore year when I built a small FTP server named "MiniFTP" with my friends that I understood how many delicate ideas of computer science lie behind a single simple network protocol. This was the first time I truly enjoyed the sense of achievement after addressing an intellectual challenge. In the following years, I worked in different teams comprised students building various systems from Web applications to Robocup Soccer 2D Simulation team. However, my activities were not always on-campus. I have participated in the 2008 Beijing Olympic as a volunteer, did a good job at the Press Conference room as an assistant manager. All these experiences taught me the key of successful teamwork and how to be a good member as well as a leader of a team, and more importantly, greatly contributed to my emotional maturity.
Having been majoring in software engineering for three years, I now have learned sound common base in computer science such as linear algebra, data structures, computer architecture, operating system, programming languages and basic algorithms. And more importantly, besides concrete knowledge, I have grasped a way to teach my self about a new and unfamiliar topic that I would encounter in the future. In the senior year of my college, with refining my romantic dream into a career goal, I decided to further my study in a world-class university, in the realm of computer science.
When it comes to my purpose of applying for graduate study, I would like to state my career goal and what do I expect from graduate education. Since I believe research works are done in order to improve our lives, to be a researcher in a giant IT corporation's laboratory and leading the cutting edge of science and technology is my career goal. However, to realize this goal, merely finishing four year's undergraduate education and obtaining a bachelor's degree is far from sufficient. My goal requires more extensive knowledge, not only specific and concrete, but also methodological. From the graduate education, I expect academic attentions and instructions of extraordinary faculties as well as communication with brilliant peers. By the commencement of the graduate education, I hope I have already achieved all these conditions that my goal requires.
Personal Statement Topic
Explain your purpose for graduate study, including your current degree goals and reasons for selecting a particular field of study.
Their request is stated above, and the total length should not exceed 4000 characters.It's my first time to write PS, could you give some suggestions to improve my essay or just refine it by correcting exotic expressions into idioms of English?
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In return for the hardworking in high school, I was the top one among students who entered AN_UNIVERSITY from A_PROVINCE (a little bit larger than Washington State of U.S., with population of 27 million) and ranked 86th place in the College Entrance Examination of A_PROVINCE, China. As a smart and curious freshman three years ago, becoming a computer scientist to lead the cutting-edge and working with brilliant colleagues from all over the world has been a romantic dream of mine. My years in college encouraged me to further my study in a world-class university and earn a Master, even a PhD degree after graduation. Although my exact research goals are yet to be refined, my interests include distributed systems and artificial intelligence.
Though I had no idea about my specific academic interest at the beginning of my college years, terms like ANN, cloud computing and distributed systems has gradually leaded me to a fantastic world of computer science and technologies. I remember it was in the summer of my sophomore year when I built a small FTP server named "MiniFTP" with my friends that I understood how many delicate ideas of computer science lie behind a single simple network protocol. This was the first time I truly enjoyed the sense of achievement after addressing an intellectual challenge. In the following years, I worked in different teams comprised students building various systems from Web applications to Robocup Soccer 2D Simulation team. However, my activities were not always on-campus. I have participated in the 2008 Beijing Olympic as a volunteer, did a good job at the Press Conference room as an assistant manager. All these experiences taught me the key of successful teamwork and how to be a good member as well as a leader of a team, and more importantly, greatly contributed to my emotional maturity.
Having been majoring in software engineering for three years, I now have learned sound common base in computer science such as linear algebra, data structures, computer architecture, operating system, programming languages and basic algorithms. And more importantly, besides concrete knowledge, I have grasped a way to teach my self about a new and unfamiliar topic that I would encounter in the future. In the senior year of my college, with refining my romantic dream into a career goal, I decided to further my study in a world-class university, in the realm of computer science.
When it comes to my purpose of applying for graduate study, I would like to state my career goal and what do I expect from graduate education. Since I believe research works are done in order to improve our lives, to be a researcher in a giant IT corporation's laboratory and leading the cutting edge of science and technology is my career goal. However, to realize this goal, merely finishing four year's undergraduate education and obtaining a bachelor's degree is far from sufficient. My goal requires more extensive knowledge, not only specific and concrete, but also methodological. From the graduate education, I expect academic attentions and instructions of extraordinary faculties as well as communication with brilliant peers. By the commencement of the graduate education, I hope I have already achieved all these conditions that my goal requires.
