papulin23
Dec 3, 2009
Undergraduate / The day that I would become the New York City champion in the 1000-meter race. Common app essay [10]
Hi there. Could you please correct something if anything is wrong? or give me advice on it? Thank you
Since the beginning of my indoor track season, I had been picturing that day, the day that I would become the New York City champion in the 1000-meter race. I was preparing myself intensely both physically and mentally in the weeks leading up to the race. That day I was nervous but ready, and when the gun fired, I quickly made my way up to the first pack of runners and stayed with them for three entire laps, waiting to make a move on the last lap. Approaching the last lap, I moved to second place and then sprinted past the first runner with 150 meters to go, just thinking about crossing the finish line in first place. When I crossed the finish line I raised my arms in victory, overjoyed that my hard work had finally paid off.
Hi there. Could you please correct something if anything is wrong? or give me advice on it? Thank you
Since the beginning of my indoor track season, I had been picturing that day, the day that I would become the New York City champion in the 1000-meter race. I was preparing myself intensely both physically and mentally in the weeks leading up to the race. That day I was nervous but ready, and when the gun fired, I quickly made my way up to the first pack of runners and stayed with them for three entire laps, waiting to make a move on the last lap. Approaching the last lap, I moved to second place and then sprinted past the first runner with 150 meters to go, just thinking about crossing the finish line in first place. When I crossed the finish line I raised my arms in victory, overjoyed that my hard work had finally paid off.