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Dec 21, 2009
Undergraduate / "Memory" - Common Application Critique! my jet-black SLR camera [2]

In my right hand I hold my jet-black SLR camera, its safety strap wrapped securely around my wrist, my finger poised on the button. My left holds a pen, an instrument of my imagination, ready to fight and wrestle down words to do my bidding. But I am at a loss. Can someone tell me how? How to capture the ephemeral dream that is memory? It eludes me and confounds me. Its very nature seeks to resist confinement and definition as I try to assign it meaning.

Could it be the fear that grips me when I am rushing at full sprint towards a hurdle? My metal spikes digging deep into the rubber of the track, my body juxtaposed between other competitors as my torso contorts itself over the barrier, each of us reveling in our shared moment of exhilaration. Or the turmoil in my mind when I cry for a first love, as my tears seeps through my cotton pillow. Mayhap this "emotion" is the way to capture memories. The joy of success, the fear in defeat, and the love felt... But that is childish of me, how can I possibly bottle emotion?

Maybe memory is in sound. Each note combined together creating a euphony known as music. Am I creating memory when my fingers dance across the piano, striking black and white keys in succession, trying to create structure from the random notes? And the arpeggios and scales twisting together, forming a distinctly unique piece that could only come from a person's soul. I can almost see the sound making different hues of color, building lines that form shapes and creates memory. Almost. But that cannot be memory; it doesn't give me an image to hold on to. I can't define memory with just sound.

I take a breath, interrupting the barrage of questions that I haven't found the answers to. My eyes glance towards that jet-black camera. Maybe.

"Chkk" A crystal clear slice of time, almost as if a knife spliced it out of a stream of consciousness. 15 couples poised in mid lift, myself in the middle, her legs wrapped around my waist as she bends backwards to smile. Neck flexed as my face struggles to compose a grin to the judges. Yes, this is memory. I can feel the emotion. I can almost hear the screams of the crowd. And I can see it."Chkk" A rare smile from a small, waiflike Beijing student as she grips the school supplies I handed her tightly, a small tear sliding down her cheek. "Chkk" Myself standing next to my best friend, my inspiration. Arms flung haphazardly over each other's shoulder. This is friendship. "Chkk" 17 pairs of running shoes riddled with holes stacked at the back of my closet. "Chkk" Debate notes. "Chkk" "Chkk"

But it's not enough. There's still not enough there to form memory. A slight moment of revelation as my left hand grips my pen. And I begin to jot down details. Homecoming performance, weeks of practice, switching partners twice. Community service on the outskirts of Beijing, cultural exchange in the weeks leading up to the Olympics. 30 minutes before we were engaged in a fierce trial over smelt fish and endangered species. Spikes, flats, trainers representing 4 years, 8 seasons of running and jumping.

This is why I am a yearbooker.

The last two paragraphs are really rough and I'm trying to integrate the last three a bit better, but overall it captured the idea I was trying to put forth.
Psyched   
Dec 23, 2009
Undergraduate / Brain first and Heart second; Common App- topic of choice [6]

I agree with Tictac, you should talk about maybe a personal situation that your mind gave you the right choice over your heart?

At the same time you don't want the college admissions officers to see you as a logical brainiac - because its the illogical things that make us who we are. Address the other side of the argument, make them see that you are willing to take chances, because that's when we follow our heart?
Psyched   
Dec 23, 2009
Undergraduate / Common App: Topic of Choice (leadership) --- [4]

I thought the essay was very good, lots of intricate thought processes and it really showed me what you value.

But I feel as if it wasn't personal enough. Its like you are talking about everyone else's accomplishments but not your own.
Psyched   
Dec 23, 2009
Undergraduate / ' "One! Two! Three!" And I rip my pants off. ' - Common app short answer - sports [4]

"One! Two! Three!" And I rip my pants off.
This isn't some sort of joke; it is our tradition in hurdle crew. To pull off our buttoned down sweats which represent so much mental luggage and prepare to soar. The first time my pants came off it was liberating. I was casting away my doubts in myself and rejoicing in the cold air swirling around my body. Since then, every time I stand behind the starting line, this bashful act affirms my strength. It is an instant where I can visualize my entire race and then let it go, because my courage is all I need. I can abandon rational thought, embrace my reckless spirit, and face the fear of throwing myself at full sprint into metal bars. And even after ripping the tendons in my ankles, even after developing Avascular necrosis, I must continue to hurdle. Because for me it has ceased to be a sport. It is how I face fear.
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