mona80
Dec 24, 2009
Writing Feedback / introduction paraghraph about equal numbers of male and female in universities [3]
hi everyone, this is mona from Iran, this is my first post. i have a lot of problems in my essays. i write an introduction paragraph in below, please check it.
topic: universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject.
Nowadays, high level education is a desire for all youth, many of them select their majors without any concern to future. In my opinion universities should accept them according to result of research about society. difference in their potency, less opportunity in finding related job for women and increasing the age of marriage are the supports for this idea.
thanks
hi everyone, this is mona from Iran, this is my first post. i have a lot of problems in my essays. i write an introduction paragraph in below, please check it.
topic: universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject.
Nowadays, high level education is a desire for all youth, many of them select their majors without any concern to future. In my opinion universities should accept them according to result of research about society. difference in their potency, less opportunity in finding related job for women and increasing the age of marriage are the supports for this idea.
thanks