akshat4541
Dec 30, 2009
Undergraduate / Yale Supplement: Life in Boarding! [4]
'Dad', I looked at him with teary eyes and in my broken English said 'Please don't leave here me, don't!'
Even the air in the boarding school seemed to demand a level of discipline, maturity and competence. Even the school's entrance gate seemed intimidating for a five year old. It looked like those haunted castles, one seen from under a blanket while watching those countless Dracula movies.
My father sympathetically smiled at me and said, "You have to do this son. This is for your own good."
I had no idea of what good it would bring to me but nevertheless I entered the boarding school and timidly looked at all the boys in identical navy blue blazers and gray shorts, walking with their heads high and shoulders straight. Their disciplined posture and plastered grins felt ominous of the austerity I would have to endure.
The gray haired Headmaster kept constantly smiling at me the moment I entered his office for my interview. His gray eyes twinkled when he smiled. Finally he said 'I hope you'll learn something important here son!'
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'Dad', I looked at him with teary eyes and in my broken English said 'Please don't leave here me, don't!'
Even the air in the boarding school seemed to demand a level of discipline, maturity and competence. Even the school's entrance gate seemed intimidating for a five year old. It looked like those haunted castles, one seen from under a blanket while watching those countless Dracula movies.
My father sympathetically smiled at me and said, "You have to do this son. This is for your own good."
I had no idea of what good it would bring to me but nevertheless I entered the boarding school and timidly looked at all the boys in identical navy blue blazers and gray shorts, walking with their heads high and shoulders straight. Their disciplined posture and plastered grins felt ominous of the austerity I would have to endure.
The gray haired Headmaster kept constantly smiling at me the moment I entered his office for my interview. His gray eyes twinkled when he smiled. Finally he said 'I hope you'll learn something important here son!'
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WORD COUNT: 535
I NEED TO CUT DOWN 35 WORDS!!
How do I come across in this essay??? Do you like it?
Please Help!! I'll return the favor!!