Undergraduate / Lehigh University Admissions Officer letter ("I anxiously wait for my decision") [4]

Hi, I did ED to Lehigh and was deferred and now I would like to send a letter to my admissions officer. Can you guys read it over for me? Thanks!

Hi! My name is Brandon R. You and I met back in early October of 2009 at my high school, High School North. In November I applied to Lehigh as an early decision applicant, and while the result was a deferral, I still want to attend Lehigh. Out of all the schools that I have looked at, Lehigh still stands out as number one on my list. The reason I applied to Lehigh early decision was because when I spent time there, I got a feeling that I got at no other college campus. A feeling of unity and school pride, and that is something that is very important to me.

I want nothing more than to attend Lehigh University in the fall of 2010. I am working as hard as possible to make this happen. I think that I have a lot that I can contribute to any college campus. I have played the roll of comeback kid all my life. From my work ethic in school to my school's baseball team, I have always been the underdog. I like to take advantage of opportunities to prove myself, and at Lehigh, I would love show everyone possible who I am. I look forwards to working hard, spending late nights in Linderman library studying for finals, to even heading up to the mountain top campus to watch the 146th meeting between Lehigh and Lafayette football. I love Lehigh University so much that I wanted to send my application for the Early Decision II applicant pool.

As I anxiously wait for my decision with in the next two months I hope you can see the amount of effort I have given to prove myself to become a Lehigh Mountain Hawk. As I said before there is nothing that I would like more that to attend Lehigh in the fall of 2010 and I am ready to put in the blood, sweat and tears to make this happen. If there are anymore opportunities for me to show you how dedicated I am please contact me as soon as possible

Undergraduate / Internship - Family and Happiness -250 Word paragraph on "What Inspires Me?' [3]

250 Word simply on "What inspires Me"
Note: Below is 220 word.

What inspires me?

There are a lot of different people and things that have inspired me though out life and while many of them have helped turn me into who I am today, there is one set of people who have truly inspired me throughout my life, my parents. They have demonstrated to me many different things that I will always have with me for the rest of my life. Hard work is the first thing that comes to mind when I think about my parents. They have worked so hard to get to where they are today and that is something that I think anyone can admire, but seeing how difficult the real world can be sometimes make me appreciate it that much more. Another way that my parents inspire me is how happy they are. You often see people who go through life just doing the motions, hating what they do every day. My parents used that hard work to go out and find something that they really enjoy doing and to me being happy is the greatest paycheck in the world, because when you do something because you love you never work a day in your life. These two things are just some of the characteristics of my parents that inspire me. I plan to do these two things exactly like my parents, work hard at finding what I love, and I think that this internship would be the first step to finding that love.