Undergraduate / "I am Chinese. I am Filipino. I am Canadian." - Stanford Roommate Supplement [10]

After showing some of my friends my first essay, some said that it wasn't really good. So I decided to rewrite it, but I don't know if this really answers the questions. Any comments or suggestions are very much appreciated. Thank you!

I am Chinese. I am Filipino. I am Canadian. I am a pure Chinese born and raised in the Philippines who recently migrated to Canada. I am a mix of all three cultures, and this mix has shaped my characteristics, influenced my personality and made me who I am.

I am Chinese. I am hardworking, I am persevering, I am determined. Throughout my life, I was taught to always focus on my studies and exert all my effort on it. My parents valued high grades and held Mathematics in a very high regard. I will be working until the last minute, and I may randomly talk about Math stuff. Until I reach what I want to reach, until I achieve what I want to achieve, I will not quit. Even if the odds are against me, I won't give up.

I am Filipino. I am hospitable, I am funny, I am patient. On the first day we meet, I will welcome you with warm hands. Even if I have never met you before, I will treat you like how I treat all my other friends. I may be shy at first, but that will not hinder me from showing you who I am. I love to tell jokes and make people laugh. I am approachable - I can listen all day to what you have to say and won't find it a bother. You can ask me all you want and I will answer all your questions, as long as I could, without ever getting annoyed.

I am Canadian. I am relaxed, I am fun, I am friendly. Despite the amount of work we will have to complete throughout our college life, I find time to do what I enjoy doing. We can have a fun shoot if we both need something to distress ourselves with; or we could talk all night long about literally anything. I talk a lot, but I can still keep quiet if you need me to, especially if you get annoyed with my chatter or you are busy doing some work. But I really will try my best not to bore you. Every moment we spend together will definitely be memorable. I make friends easily and can start conversations with anyone. I am sure we will be good friends.

I am all three. I am the fruit of all three cultures. I am me.