Undergraduate / Bates Vitality Essay--Collecting and Restoring Antique Books [6]

I LOVE THIS. The imagery is thrilling; it is unique and the admissions office will actually want to read it, will enjoy reading it.

About extending your knowledge of the "book arts"... this is not literally what you will be contributing. Perhaps you could say something about wanting to discover people, and see them for more than meets the eye. Not repair them, of course- but appreciate them for those things which take an effort to see. Talk about how you will extend yourself to the people, the Bates community.

Personally I'm just beginning my response, I've been struggling with the question. Only a few hours left, ah! Good luck to you :)

Undergraduate / UPenn page 217 of my autobiography: Strength of Stature [8]

WOW!!!
I honestly don't have any criticism for you. I had to try to think of possible changes that you could make. If you must do anything, then I recommend incorporating more about the less literal sense of "strength of stature", and the emotional consequences of slumping your shoulders. I really had to work hard at thinking of even that one suggestion, though, so obviously this essay is spectacular as it is. Believe that it is incredible! It follows the prompt very well, and is beautifully written. I say.. SUBMIT IT IMMEDIATELY.

Undergraduate / UPenn page 217 of my autobiography: Strength of Stature [8]

Having read this essay, I highly doubt that the error will detract much from your application. After all, Yale knows that we're going to college to learn- we're not applying because we're perfect. If it makes you feel better though, I just realized that an essay I sent to Notre Dame yesterday had a grammatical agreement error in it... I think I read over it 1 billion times, too.

Like I said... BEAUTIFUL, you're a poet.

Undergraduate / Brown-Best advice: "Be sexy, confident" [6]

This is a sexy essay.
I am not sure that that can actually be said, but I really enjoyed it. Your Korean culture examples made it very specific to you, and quite original. It is edgy, and yet very perfect. I do not think it contradicts your commonapp essay at all, you're just worrying too much I'm sure. Well done!!!!

Would you mind reading mine?