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Posts by agon123
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agon123   
Jan 6, 2010
Undergraduate / "My high grades confirm that I deserve a better school";TRANSFER OBJECTIVES & REASONS [3]

This essay is only halfway done, but I will post it anyway. Any advice would be appreciated. Thank you.

Please provide a statement (250 words minimum) that addresses your reasons for transferring and the objectives you hope to achieve.

Almost anyone's main objective for attending college first and foremost would be to lay the groundwork for their future endeavors. The most logical way to go about acting upon such a decision would be to determine for one's self which institution is most appropriate for their intentions. This reasoning is basically what has influenced my personal decision to transfer. I feel as though the most beneficial thing that I can do for myself would be to enter a new environment more suited to my character, and equipped to prepare me for my future comings.

My experience at St. Leo University has certainly been enjoyable and well worth the venture, but to put blatantly, I feel I have substantially earned high enough grades to receive admission into a significantly better school. I have developed close and long lasting friendships/relationships at St. Leo, but I am almost certain that entering a school with a more notably academically oriented student body would allow me to excel that much further. One major thing which I have discovered about myself that has helped to prompt this decision is that I get very stimulated intellectually. An atmosphere that could maximize this sensation and be more encouraging of it would therefore be more fit.
agon123   
Jan 7, 2010
Undergraduate / Carleton College Short Answer -favorite subject, career, interest, book, teacher [3]

I may suggest that instead of specifying a specific disease you plan on curing, maybe you should be a little more broad. Possibly something along the lines of after having the experience with your aunt, you dream of finding a cure to any devastating disease as long as you can save countless lives. That's just my two cents.
agon123   
Jan 7, 2010
Undergraduate / U Michigan-Academic interest. Why Psychology? [4]

I quickly looked over it. Looks pretty good. In the sentence: It is inevitable consequence of my curiosity in peoples' multifarious ways of behavior, perception, and emotion...you need to put the word "an" between "is" and "inevitable" so it reads" It is an inevitable consequence
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