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no183   
Feb 1, 2010
Essays / To write an essay regarding attitude [8]

Hi all i am new here as intro by friend, u know i came from malaysia, which level of english is s**K, now my lecturer told me to write an essay regarding attitude, seriously, single word essay i hate the most, any idea how to start?
no183   
Feb 1, 2010
Essays / To write an essay regarding attitude [8]

mm, my due date is thursday...
btw, my language subject, which mean chinese, malay and english is su*k that the reason i hate language subject, this is a compulsory career research subject, so i hate to face it
no183   
Mar 4, 2010
Letters / English career Course -- resume and cover letter [6]

Hi, i am taking my english carrer course, and now time to summit all my final work.. Here i post some of my initial work, could anyone help me check this out?

p/s i think my resume is still quite short, anything i can add in? by the way, i am INACTIVE in other curricular activities.

thanks
Cover letter:

John
103 Ground floor, Jalan Sultan Ismail,
20000, Kuala Terengganu,
Terengganu Darul Iman.

Landart Design Penang Pte Ltd
No. 42, Jalan Chow Thye,
10050 Penang.

Dear ,

APPLICATION FOR TRAINEE POSITION OF MECHANICAL ENGINEER

I wish to apply the above-mentioned position in your company to fulfill practical training requirement by the university. The duration of the training is about 8 weeks starting from the end of April 2010.

2. As I am still in the process of learning, this practical training will be a great opportunity for me to gain knowledge and experiences for myself in the field of mechanical engineering by exposing myself to the real situation that required knowledge and experience which I have to face in the future time. Besides, I am able to maintain a good grade point (GPA) of 3.71, which is first class in the course. Altogether, this makes me an ideal candidate for this internship position.

3. Currently, I am enrolled in the 3rd year of Bachelor in Mechanical Engineering course at main campus of Universiti Teknologi Malaysia, Skudai, and I will be graduating on the May of 2011. This course has enabled me to know more about what a machine system is and how it work etc. Besides, i also successfully undergone some minor project during this 3 years. All this experience which i think is enough for me to prepare myself for this internship in your company.

4. Enclosed please find a current copy of my resume. If you should have any questions regarding how my skills fit in your organization, feel free to give me a call at 018-1234567. I may also be reached by E-mail at John@siswa.utm.my. Thank you for considering me for this position. I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Sincerely,

______________________
John

John
103, Ground Floor, Jalan Sultan Ismail,
20000, Kuala Terengganu,
Terengganu DI.
Tel : 018-1234567

PEROSONAL PARTICULARS
NRIC : 345632-23-2343 Gender - male
Age : 22

EDUCATION
2007 - Current UNIVERSITI TEKNOLOGI MALAYSIA, Skudai
Bachelor of Mechanical Engineering (Mechanical)
Graduation Date: May, 2011 G.P.A. 3.71/4.00 (Current)

2006 - 2007 KOLEJ MATRIKULASI PAHANG, Gambang
Physical science stream
Graduation Date: April, 2007 G.P.A. 4.00/4.00

2001 - 2005 SEKOLAH MENENGAH KEBANGSAAN CHUNG HWA WEI SIN, Kuala Terengganu
Science stream, SPM 2005 - 8A, PMR 2003 - 7A

EXPERIENCE
OCT 2003 Computech Sdn. Bhd.
Part Time Computer Technician
Handled customer complaint (Walk-in and telephones)
Handled computer project for organization

OCT 2004 Namin Eletrical CO
Part Time Electrical Appliance Technician
Handled customer complaint (Walk-in and outdoors)
In charge with Audio/Video Appliance services

MAY 2008 Universiti Teknologi Malaysia
Successfully undergo engineering workshop with consists of the following module:
a) Lathing b)Milling
c)Boiler d)Welding
e)CAD/CAM f)Computer Maintenance
g)CNC Milling h)Rapid prototype
i)Composite j)Metrology
k)Instrumentation l)Safety
m)Tooling n)Sample preparation
o)Hydraulic and pneumatic p)Auto transmission
q)Sheet metal forming r)Grinding
s)Drilling t)Engineering professional practice

ACTIVITIES
SEKOLAH MENENGAH KEBANGSAAN CHUNG HWA WEI SIN, Kuala Terengganu
Member of football association, Mathematic club, and Scout
FEB 2001 Participate in membership camp for scouting team
Successfully been honored as 2nd overall pick patrol leader
JUL 2002 Elected as assistant coordinator for mathematic week for school level
Successfully achieved most attendance record in history
MAC 2003 Participate in the sports day football competition
Finish 4th overall in SMR category in the Jogathon competition
JUN 2003 Take part in the JAMBOREE Camp in Thailand
APR 2004 Organized CHWS Futsal Open 2004
MAC 2005 Participate in sports day parade

KOLEJ MATRIKULASI PAHANG, Gambang
Member of badminton club
DEC 2006 Participate in badminton competition
MAC 2007 Participate in football competition in college level

SKILLS AND STRENGTHS
Language Proficiency
Able to listen, speak and read in Chinese, English, Malay

Computer Skills
Microsoft Windows 98, 2K, XP, Vista
Microsoft office 2000, 2003, 2007
Autodesk AUTOCAD 2007, MathCAD MATLAB, FORTRAN

Miscellaneous Skills
Work systematically under pressure with minimal supervision
Communicate with all levels and ranks of people
Able to cooperate and to lead the group
Able to generate new ideas and quickly solve problems

HOBBY / INTERESTS
Computer software programming and hardware
Technology in latest gadgets and products
Electronic and mechanical machines
Surfing the net, playing computer games
no183   
Mar 5, 2010
Letters / English career Course -- resume and cover letter [6]

I dont really understand what do you mean by "first class in the course". Best GPA in class?[/quote]
yea, first class mean person who have CGPA of 3.67 above

And you could write something like "Master of critical and positive thinking". Not sure about this one though.

not sure what you talking about this, any ways thanks for helping :)
no183   
Mar 6, 2010
Letters / English career Course -- resume and cover letter [6]

Thanks for spending time on my work. Well, I have done some edit to the cover letter as you said. Is there still anything that needs improvement? By the way, i feel that, the resume is quite short, is there any idea to increase the length of the resume?
no183   
Feb 26, 2011
Grammar, Usage / climb or climb up? GRAMMAR QUESTION [6]

i think both are correct? as normally we just use climb (everyone knows that climb in upward direction).
For me, i will always use climb for upward, and climb down for opposite direction.
no183   
Feb 26, 2011
Research Papers / Data analyzing essay, out of idea, how to reach the word required? [6]

The following chart shows the annual sales of a retail chain store for the year 2006. Based on the information presented and your background knowledge, write an analysis and discussion of the sales trend.

Write in not more than 250 words.

Figure shows the annual sales for toys, books and stationary of a retail chain store for the year 2006. In general, the sale for each of the item varies with month. We can see that the sale for toy at the highest point in the month of November. This is mainly because of the demand for it due to the Malaysia school holiday season. Another reason is because most of the people bought the toy for the preparation of an event, e.g. Christmas, which comes in December. As we know, the price for these toys would rise in the month of December due to high demand towards it. Next, we can see maximum sale for books and stationary at the month of December, followed by the month of January and February. Most of the reason is due to the beginning of the new school year for the student.

148 words
sadly i just got this much, any point i can add in?



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no183   
Feb 26, 2011
Undergraduate / A degree from the School of Engineering at Virginia Polytechnic and State University [6]

I am a well-rounded individual with a passion for science and technology. Receiving this scholarship will allow me the privilege to continue to serve as a leader in my community and jumpstart my college education at Virginia Polytechnic and State University

perhaps u should give the example to justify the point above? E.g, u active in basketball activity, taking part of any camp etc?
just my 2 cent
no183   
Feb 26, 2011
Grammar, Usage / Lacking a verb? Is this sentence correct? [5]

Just curious if this works?
The primary function of the heart is to circulate the blood. Through this function, oxygen and vital minerals can be transferred to the tissues and organs that comprise the body.
no183   
Feb 28, 2011
Research Papers / Data analyzing essay, out of idea, how to reach the word required? [6]

The figure shows the annual sales for toys, books and stationary of a retail chain store for the year 2006. In general, the sale for each of the item varies from one month to the next. We can see that the sale for toys at the highest point in the month of November. This is mainly because of the demand for it due to the Malaysia school holiday season. Another reason is because most of the people bought the toy for the preparation of an event, e.g. Christmas, which comes in December. As we know, the price for these toys would rise in the month of December due to high demand towards it. Next, we can see maximum sale for books and stationary at the month of December, followed by the month of January and February. Most of the reason is due to the beginning of the new school year for the student. The figure also shows that the sales for book and stationary begin to rise from the month of July to October. The reason that contributes to this factor is most of the students begin to prepare for their year end semester exam which normally held between the late of October and the early of November. Finally, we can conclude that the sale of the chain retail store changes with month. Besides, the sale for books and stationary is highest at the schooling period, while sales of toys will be highest at holiday or festive season.

248 words
Is this ok?
1) Actually, the conclusion I made, I still feel strange about it. I not sure if it is ok for the conclusion.
2) At the figure there is numerical value which represent the sale amount for each of the particulars but I dint use it, is it ok?

3) "In general, the sale for each of the item varies from one month to the next."
The sale in this sentence is a noun am I right? And if it is, is it singular due to sale is uncountable?
4) I presume the 3rd question I say is correct, sale is a noun for the sentence. Then
"In general, the sale for each of the item varies from one month to the next."
Compare with
"In general, the sale for each of the items vary from one month to the next."
Compare with
"In general, the sale forbooks, stationary and toys vary from one month to the next."
Compare with
"In general, the sale forbooks, stationary and toys varies from one month to the next."
Which one is correct which one is wrong and why? or there is a choice between 4 of them?
thanks Kevin for examining my essay
no183   
Mar 1, 2011
Writing Feedback / students' competence at all levels of the Malaysian education [6]

Part B (30 minutes)

You are advised to spend about 30 minutes on this task.

Present assessment of students' competence at all levels of the Malaysian education system does not capture the abilities required in the work place.

Do you agree with the statement? Give your opinion.

Write in not fewer than 250 words.

I agree with the statement above. Indeed, students came from Malaysia education system unable to capture the abilities required in the work environment. Some of these issues are due to the behaviour of the student itself. Besides, there are still weaknesses that lie in the Malaysian education system such as the technique used to teach and the technology implemented etc.

One of the main reasons which caused Malaysian student unable to capture the abilities required at the workplace is come from themselves. Bad personality such as lack of enthusiasm and seriousness in working all contribute to this factor. This can be proved when mostly all the assignment and project submitted by the student are in the bad shape. This shows that they done the work given to them seriously. Even worse, some of the students choose not to do the work given.

Besides student, unsuitable technique of teaching also can caused the student does not have the ability to work in reality. Today, teaching and learning process of mostly all the school or institute in Malaysia too rely on the example of the problem. It is common to hear that mostly all the lecture time is spend on giving and explaining example rather than conducting teaching process. As a consequence, students fail to understand regarding the theory taught.

Finally, the quality assurance also plays the role in Malaysian education system. In this case is the Malaysia Quality Assurance (MQA), an organization which accredited the level of Malaysian education system. The loose in the management of the MQA in accrediting the level of the education system do affect this issue. As we can see, now days the syllabus in our education system covers narrow range of topic compare to others. This narrow range of topic can be only enough to let the student to know the basic. But in reality, the situation encountered will be far more complicated compare to what they have learnt previously. As a result, most of them will fall at this stage.

From the previous paragraph, we can concluded that student's ability do been influenced by many party. This includes the institute, staff, and even the student itself. In order to come out with more students that have high ability, all the problems stated above must be encountered first.

382 words

idea?
P/S i still not sure regarding my conclusion. seriously, i am bad in making conclusion :(
no183   
Mar 21, 2011
Research Papers / Data analyzing essay, out of idea, how to reach the word required? [6]

sorry for the late reply Kevin, i have some confuse here regarding the last reply.. so you meant that
A)In general, the salesof books, stationary and toys vary from one month to the next."
Sales = Plural
B)In general, the sale of books, stationary and toys varies from one month to the next."
Sale = Uncountable, thus assume to be single
both correct?
no183   
Mar 24, 2011
Writing Feedback / students' competence at all levels of the Malaysian education [6]

oh, okay..
i get it, i asked this because i am out of vocabulary actually.. I am conducting a thesis (research) which the result and discussion would need a lot of such words. Unfortunately, due to my poor vocabulary, i only to use the same or limited style (eg: the factor contributes, ) of phrases. Thus, i feel really "boring" when i read thru it due to my poor expression style. u know my mean right?

In simple, i am finding the way to improve my style of expression. :)
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