Undergraduate / My journey towards success - This is for my common application [6]

would appreciate it if anyone can help me know if my essay needs more work and an advice on what changes i need to make..

Thanx

They say success comes from the sweat and tears of hard work, experience and initiative. I have never climbed uphill barefoot neither tripped over an obstacle. My journey barefoot started while working with autistic kids. It was a god sent job to compensate the love I have to go to medical school and have a job in the medical field. The experience I gained working individually with every child is like amassing fortunes.

Growing up spoon-fed to every need and having the financial luxury my father was blessed with I never knew the meaning of neither patience nor obstacles. This experience has influenced my goals because if I had not went through it, I would not have known patience,determination, success and ambition truly. I am very grateful for such an eye-opening event in my life. Moreover, I know now that truly "What does not kill me, makes me stronger."