Matthew32
Mar 29, 2010
Undergraduate / "Visiting new countries" - introduction for admission essay [3]
"My family and I go to travel very often"
"I have been bridging cultures throughout my life."
"This experience has taught me to look for differences to compromise and similarities to synthesize in order to balance different cultures."
"After spendingjourneys visiting new places, you want to get back to a nice and relaxing place."
You might want to check these statements for correct sentence structuring. There's no clear idea stated yet in your opening paragraph.
"Visiting new countries is very entertaining."
Yes going on vacations can be fun and entertaining but there should be a deeper motive here. I would love to travel the world but no one is going to just give me a job doing so because I really enjoy it.
"My family and I go to travel very often"
"I have been bridging cultures throughout my life."
"This experience has taught me to look for differences to compromise and similarities to synthesize in order to balance different cultures."
"After spending
You might want to check these statements for correct sentence structuring. There's no clear idea stated yet in your opening paragraph.
"Visiting new countries is very entertaining."
Yes going on vacations can be fun and entertaining but there should be a deeper motive here. I would love to travel the world but no one is going to just give me a job doing so because I really enjoy it.
