montes999
Apr 16, 2010
Undergraduate / How will IIT prepare you to be a positive contributor to the world? [5]
Hi guys.
I am a Mongolian student. I am applying ti IIT and need someone's help to check my essay. Would you help me?
I have written my second little essay. The question is "How will do you think IIT will prepare you to be a positive contributor to the world". no more than 2000 characters. And here is what I have done. I am sure there are many mistakes. Please, correct me.
Even in the most difficult situations I feel myself happy because I have brilliant friends. People who meet me always admire my friends and ask how to find such good friends. And most of them think that it is very difficult to make friends and requires long time, tremendous persists and economical ability. But the ...
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The reason why I asked God to create me and the reason being human are to do everything that I can for my nation, for people around the world. I should use my body, my brain completely to satisfy my desire to create and help. For a long time my country, my parents have given me everything that I need. My debt is enormous and I have little time to give it back. I strongly believe that Illinois Institute of Technology will help me to reach my goal and not to beg again God to create me.
Becoming a student of Illinois Institute of Technology I will get the opportunity to be friend with many scientists from whom I will learn and whom I will teach. Sometimes, even strong, intelligent, and ingenious people need help. I will tell them words they need, present smiles to encourage them, be friend to understand and opponent to sharp. And also I will suggest many interesting ideas and ask fascinating questions which will be the beginning of innovations and developments. Having a great relationship with foreign scientists and being educated are the most important things for me to reach my goals. Because my dream is to design and open a computer science, technology and information center of Mongolia that serves as a scientific bridge between Mongolia and other parts of the world. A center like this could have a tremendous significance in promoting international understanding and goodwill. Computer Science can contribute to this mission in several areas such as technical and educational exchanges and economic and environmental stability.
I know how strong is asking for something. Even I am young and strong I was in many difficult situations and asked many people for help. This anxious feeling even more incites me to think, be diligent patient and brave. But there are many students who are in worse situation than mine. And when I graduate, I will do tremendous works to help these students and give them beliefs to their lives.
Hi guys.
I am a Mongolian student. I am applying ti IIT and need someone's help to check my essay. Would you help me?
I have written my second little essay. The question is "How will do you think IIT will prepare you to be a positive contributor to the world". no more than 2000 characters. And here is what I have done. I am sure there are many mistakes. Please, correct me.
Even in the most difficult situations I feel myself happy because I have brilliant friends. People who meet me always admire my friends and ask how to find such good friends. And most of them think that it is very difficult to make friends and requires long time, tremendous persists and economical ability. But the ...
(after edits:)
The reason why I asked God to create me and the reason being human are to do everything that I can for my nation, for people around the world. I should use my body, my brain completely to satisfy my desire to create and help. For a long time my country, my parents have given me everything that I need. My debt is enormous and I have little time to give it back. I strongly believe that Illinois Institute of Technology will help me to reach my goal and not to beg again God to create me.
Becoming a student of Illinois Institute of Technology I will get the opportunity to be friend with many scientists from whom I will learn and whom I will teach. Sometimes, even strong, intelligent, and ingenious people need help. I will tell them words they need, present smiles to encourage them, be friend to understand and opponent to sharp. And also I will suggest many interesting ideas and ask fascinating questions which will be the beginning of innovations and developments. Having a great relationship with foreign scientists and being educated are the most important things for me to reach my goals. Because my dream is to design and open a computer science, technology and information center of Mongolia that serves as a scientific bridge between Mongolia and other parts of the world. A center like this could have a tremendous significance in promoting international understanding and goodwill. Computer Science can contribute to this mission in several areas such as technical and educational exchanges and economic and environmental stability.
I know how strong is asking for something. Even I am young and strong I was in many difficult situations and asked many people for help. This anxious feeling even more incites me to think, be diligent patient and brave. But there are many students who are in worse situation than mine. And when I graduate, I will do tremendous works to help these students and give them beliefs to their lives.