Writing Feedback / IELTS writing_International sporting occasions help to ease international tensions [2]

Hi everyone, this is my IELTS essay. Pls read it and give me some comments. Thanks:

Popular events like the football World Cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

International sporting events are a good change to create a multi-nation community of fans having the same passion. It will help people around the world understand each other more. Since, international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way.

An international sporting event is normal held in a country with huge interest from fans all over the world. For the time of occasions, people regardless of nationality, origin and religion will live together. People can understand more about a country, it is useful to ease tensions between nations. For example in FIFA World Cup 2010, the relation between North Korea and South Korea is dangerous for the warship sinking. The world suspected North Korea of the aggressive action. However, due to this event North Korea showed a friendship and enthuasism. It is rare times when people can learn about this country. It really help to alleviate the tension.

Besides easing tensions, an international sporting event also helps fans release patriotic emotions in a safe way. When they garther together to encourage their team, they will show their patriotic emotions. Regardless of the competition between teams, their emotions are always released in a safe way due to the sole passion of the sport. Moreover, all fans know that a sport event will attract the attention of whole the world and a lot of public media. They will try to create a beautiful image about their land and people. In Olympic Beijing 2008, Chinese tried thier best to bring the world a spectacular image about their country. First of all, foreigners came here always received the support of friendly volunteers who were young students. They were welcomed by each Chinese hospitality, beauty in each cities. Everythings is created by patriotic emotions of Chinese who wanted to bring a beautiful China to the world.

In conclusion, International sporting events will draw the international concern. It will make the world more peaceful by easing internation tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way.

Writing Feedback / Essay _ How will Vietnamese diet change in the next 50 years? [4]

I write an essay about How will Vietnamese diet change in the next 50 years. Pls give me some comments. Thanks

In the next 50 years, there will be many aspects in economy and culture different from today. The foreseen progress of the globalization in culture and economy will affect Vietnamese diet. I believe the Vietnamese diet will change significantly because of this progress.

In future, the border between countries will almost disappear due the globalization. People can easily travel from Vietnam to Europe, American and other countries. Therefore, they will have chances to taste foods belonging to different parts of the world. It will shape a generation like foods belong to variety of cultures. Foreign foods will come to Vietnam and become familiar. Therefore, the role of traditional foods will decrease in Vietnamese community.

Nowadays, Vietnam is integrating the international economy. Vietnamese life style has to change to adapt requirements of the new age. Vietnamese workers will spend shorter and shorter time for eating. As the result, fast foods will become dominant in future. In the next 50 years, we will witness more fast food brand name besides Mc Donald, KFC, Lotteria .etc. On the other hands, the industrial life will also make traditional family meals get rarer. Because future parents have to work late and do not have enough time to prepare meals. Each member has to self-prepare for their meal. The chances for members to eat at home together become harder.

Vietnam will change sharply in the next 50 years and the changes in Vietnamese diet can not be denied. Traditional foods will be replaced by international and convenient foods. The eating style has to change to adapt new requirements.