Essays / If i have million dollars I would help these organizations... [4]

hello everyone, could you please write an essay about the above topic.
Today, i went to take GED writing test. Thats my second writing test. My first one got a 0 marks. Its because of misunderstanding the topic. This time, i have no idea....weather i will pass or fail. I am so nervous.

The above topic is the GED test writing essay. If u don't mind to jot some essay about this topic. So, i can learn from my mistake or i will think to take ESL class instead of wasting my time to take GED. I just need a good options!... please let me know about my English writing too.. my most weakness is, i don't read book at all. My laziness!

Whoever put me some tips, i am very much appreciated! thanks!

Writing Feedback / "True beauty" is the good humanity [5]

Everyone does have their own view of "True Beauty." As far as my opinion, my true beauty is the good humanity.

I remember the day of my old school that we had discussion on the true beauty topic. Many of my friends were arguing that their true beauty is a girl with a sexy body and a nice shape. During that period, we all were young and we have no idea of these things. Only we can see was beautiful lady on a heavy make-up.

As we grown up, we now realized the true meaning of beauty. Beauty doesn't count as an external looks only. The main part of the beauty is the one's internal behavior.

For example; Nelson Mandela, Ghandiji, The Dalai lama, Martinlutha King and more. They are the one whom i do present as the "True Beauty". These are the people who severed their nation no matter what happened to them. Because of their true inner beauty, this young generation people eager to call them as a true beauty.

hey everyone,
looks like my essay has a lot of grammer mistake ... could you please check it and explain me well.
thank you.
Need help! truely!