Undergraduate / "I work harder for me and only me" - Michigan State University [19]

I liked your essay a lot. A little wordsmithing can help make your point a little better. Towards the end, you need to bring back the theme that started your essay so it all ties in together.

Letters / the Architecture program at Tulane University - my Admissions Letter [5]

I don't think that you should start by making a general critical statement about Washington State such as "the university meets my needs, academically and environmentally" That immediately turns off the reader and makes it seem like you're blaming someone else for what could be your problem. Even the choice of words - "my needs" makes it sound whiny and self-serving.

Nothing wrong with identifying problems with your current environment - just make sure you make a specific statement about why you are unable to achieve your academic goals at WSU.

Letters / the Architecture program at Tulane University - my Admissions Letter [5]

No, that is much better. But you must follow it up with a specific well-reasoned argument about (a) what about it doesn't meet your unique needs, and (b) what about Tulane will be different and meet your needs.

Undergraduate / School - the place where I like to visit again and again and still has influence on me [6]


I may even go one step further ...

This is all why I feel that my first school and my teachers still has have influence on me.

But, that's just an opinion. Kevin is probably more correct than I am ...

:)