kleek
May 22, 2010
Undergraduate / Multinational student body / national diversification - personal statement [5]
Hello everyone,
I am writing a personal statement for a university admission, and I need some help with a sentence. I tried to change hundreds of times, and still does not sound or look right at all.
Here is the part I am struggling with:
"Another reason to seek admission is the university's multinational student body. That is very important to me because I am a representative of a foreign nation myself. "
or
"Another reason to seek admission here is the national diversification of the student population, this will make me feel more comfortable on campus since I am a representative of a foreign nation myself."
Thank you in advance to those who will help
Hello everyone,
I am writing a personal statement for a university admission, and I need some help with a sentence. I tried to change hundreds of times, and still does not sound or look right at all.
Here is the part I am struggling with:
"Another reason to seek admission is the university's multinational student body. That is very important to me because I am a representative of a foreign nation myself. "
or
"Another reason to seek admission here is the national diversification of the student population, this will make me feel more comfortable on campus since I am a representative of a foreign nation myself."
Thank you in advance to those who will help